Thursday, 7 February 2008

haiku - red

black clouds
grumble with thunder -
red umbrellas

willows lean
over a red painted boat -
rain dimpled river

previously published in Haiku Scotland


polona said...

both very good... te colour really works in both haiku.

Bill said...

Two brightly visual haiku. As polona points out,the red is beautifully placed.

poefusion said...

Beautifully worded haiku. The color has a strong, vivid presence. I linger among the willow and take a seat on the red boat feeling the rain against my skin. Thanks for sharing. Have a nice night.