Tuesday 26 January 2010

haiku

skeleton trees
on the railway embankment -
a cloud of crows




previously published in Blithe Spirit, the journal of the British Haiku Society

16 comments:

Kat Mortensen said...

I really like this one, Juliet. My husband said he saw over 100 crows in a tree outside his office yesterday. He said it reminded him of the balls on the ends of brush-bristles. Ooh! I wish he'd had a camera!

I've just posted one featuring doves.

Anonymous said...

The images crow cloud image is so clearly in my head. Glad you stopped by my old blog (now used for photography). I am here now.

Rachel Green said...

This is beautiful indeed.

Anonymous said...

I was just thinking of a crow poem, but was going to get murder in there somewhere. I like this one.

And those trees on your header are gorgeous.

mark said...

A wonderful haiku, Juliet. Well done! I quite like your haiku!

Thomma Lyn said...

Oh wow, I love this. So evocative -- "cloud of crows" and "skeleton trees"; speaking of which, I love your new blog header. It's gorgeous!

Bill said...

Natural and a bit sinister.

Caron said...

I like this haiku. I really enjoy seeing the dark trees against the winter sky.

jennifer black said...

I love that. What an amazing visual it provides. I'll never see a flock of crows (well, we have grackles, not crows, but, you know) the same way.

Jennifer

Caroline Gill said...

Another fine Haiku, Juliet. Love the professional feel of your latest blogskin-style.

Area 17 said...

I'm always a sucker for a crow haiku and anything to do with railways. ;-)

a hand's width of crows
the crookedness of branches
zigzagging frost


Alan Summers
Alan’s Area 17 blog
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angela recada said...

I really like this one, too, Juliet! Especially combined with the new header photo of skeleton trees. Trees, a somber sky and crows - three of my favorite things.

jem said...

Good one Juliet. I love the words 'skeleton' and 'cloud' both specific and striking.

Gillena Cox said...

love those trees

much love
gillena

Julie said...

Beautiful image. I love the cloud of crows on the last line. It makes me feel as if I'm rising with them.

libbyquilter said...

a wonderful haiku and yes, it does fit in well with your header photo~!~

i've been expereimenting around with haiku a bit myself lately and am finding it quite addicting~!~

:)
libbyQ