I love this and I will keep up my argument with you for life about the haiku form, but how about we call it a truce and say that for you your way is right, and for me mine is right. You are a brillaint writer.
Chris - we're not arguing as far as I'm aware! However even the Japanese masters didn't necessarily stick to 5-7-5 syllables, and in fact one line haiku were more common back then. English syllables are so different from Japanese syllables, longer fora start that although it is useful to stick to 7-5-7 for the discipline, it is more useful to say no more than 5-7-5 syllables in practice! There's also so much more to haiku than how many syllables there are.
I like how everyone is seeing different things in this, just as we couldn't decide whether it was a lost chick or one taking a brave and confident step towards independence! So thanks rax, ascender, remiman, pepek, pearl.
And Chris, thanks for your compliment on my writing. I should have said that earlier, but got sidetracked!
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How melancholy...But beautiful.
I love this and I will keep up my argument with you for life about the haiku form, but how about we call it a truce and say that for you your way is right, and for me mine is right. You are a brillaint writer.
Chris - we're not arguing as far as I'm aware! However even the Japanese masters didn't necessarily stick to 5-7-5 syllables, and in fact one line haiku were more common back then. English syllables are so different from Japanese syllables, longer fora start that although it is useful to stick to 7-5-7 for the discipline, it is more useful to say no more than 5-7-5 syllables in practice! There's also so much more to haiku than how many syllables there are.
Colourful prose - thanks!
beautifully rendered vision- filling up the reader's eyes with drops from the splash of the rain on rivers.
wow, that has a lot of intrigue and plot for being so small. What happened to the parents of the bobbing fluff?
awww poor thing; as a mom whose chicks are leaving the nest - it sure does resonate!
Sad. Reminds me of seeing several baby ducks trying to cross 7th East.
Juliet,
How brave an undaunted they seem!
truly in command of their world.
rel
I like how everyone is seeing different things in this, just as we couldn't decide whether it was a lost chick or one taking a brave and confident step towards independence! So thanks rax, ascender, remiman, pepek, pearl.
And Chris, thanks for your compliment on my writing. I should have said that earlier, but got sidetracked!
beautiful yet ambiguous image --I feel that this is pretty bittersweet, but I can also see the bravery in it.
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