fine dark soil
and a red watering can –
green shoots.
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a fresh salmon
on a jumble of twigs –
squawking osprey chicks.
nurture for One Deep Breath
and a red watering can –
green shoots.
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a fresh salmon
on a jumble of twigs –
squawking osprey chicks.
nurture for One Deep Breath
18 comments:
beautiful haiku.
I like the first especially. I see my mom planting and watering.
Also liked your "silence" post and that you included the source of your recycled materials.
i love the "aha! moment-ness" of this ! (despite my lame description)
beautiful, especially like the second one...
fifi - thanks - glad it reminds you of your mom!
Susan - thanks, "aha momentness" - yes I've never found a good way of saying that either!
Polona - thanks!
The first one sounds very oriental. I like it.
Oh, these were both wonderful- very sensual and vivid in their imagery!
...interesting read, enjoyed the haiku.
Yes, very nice, well crafted haiku. The clarity of the first and the "aha" moment is wonderful.
I enjoyed both of these very much. The first does sound like roots haiku. Very nice...
I loved how you gave us the image of a red can and a fresh salmon as nurtures.
These are so full of color! Love the first one especially :)
Really nice haikus. In the first one I love the colors and how the haiku is rich with new life. In the second one I love the variety of images and also the squawking chicks -- I can hear them as I read it.
You are very 'crafty' indeed with your poems... I really like these haiku. The traditional feel to them is divine.
I am unable to add anything to what others have said. I like them both very much.
i particularly liked the 'jumble of twigs' in the snapshot of the second haiku, and the colourful elements of the natural recipe in the first.
The colour of the first was palpable. Mmm.
Your first one spoke to me, it was enough on its own and yet I knew that any second another color could appear - or not.
i like these haikus - esp. the green shoot in the red watering can :-)
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