Monday, 21 May 2007

haiku - Edinburgh viewpoints

top floor flat window -
aerobatic swifts screech
across evening clouds.


jackdaws call from the
red crags above the city -
bagpipes in the gorse.


Viewpoints for One Deep Breath

15 comments:

hanulf said...

Beautiful. I love watching birds... and so do my cats (I did a photo post about it recently called ''Meanwhile''). Unlike the cats, though, I don't wish to eat the birds.

Thanks for stopping by!

polona said...

these are beautiful.
we have swallows and martins but i don't think i've seen swifts.
jackdaws are not very common either (gooded crows prevail) but i have seen a few...

Clare said...

Lovely haikus! They really are perfect little snapshots -- I love the movement and sound of the birds, and the visual details of clouds and crags -- plus the wondrous sound of bagpipes! Oh, and it was great to click the links and get to read about the swifts and jackdaws -- thank you!

Beaman said...

I like them both, especially the first one. The imagery of the swifts, wonderful.

Tammy said...

Wonderful haiku with that Edinburgh flavor...loved them.

Regina Clare Jane said...

Having been to Edinburgh, I can really picture these haiku... the gorse, the crags above the city, the birds. Thanks for the beautiful reminder of a lovely time!

quietpaths said...

These both call forth images of places which I've never had the chance to visit - yet. Swifts and bagpipes, great.

Ron said...

I love those images and I am not familiar with those names. I love learning new words....like 'gorse'.

Sandy said...

Love your Scottish words! I have read about Jackdaws in books but have never looked them up. Thanks for including the bird info, so interesting. You poems create a setting I would like to see someday.

Clockworkchris said...

Very nice. I love bagpipes. That was a nice thing to include. I like your diction. It makes you very unique.

Remiman said...

Juliet,
I like how you are so good at expressing your observations with picture perfect haiku.
I stood on the stoop tonight after supper and marveled at the aerial circus the riot of birds provided.
rel

megan said...

every word built the picture...felt like I was there... a swooping good job

Becoming Amethyst said...

yes, megan stole the words form my mouth (or rather from my keyboard!) ~ you painted a fantastic picture of these bird's eye views :)

Patois said...

What I really liked about the poetry was that I didn't need a photo to accompany it. You made the viewpoint appear for me.

Crafty Green Poet said...

hanulf - thanks for letting me know about your posts - I enjoyed reading them!

Polona - we have lots of hooded crows in Scotland too.

Clare, Sandy - glad you used the links, I'm trying to remember to add them where I think its useful.

Beaman, Tammy - thanks

Regina - glad they brought back some nice memories!

Quietpaths, Ron - thanks!

Chris - we're all unique!

Rel, Megan, Becoming Amethyst, Patois - thanks!