top floor flat window -
aerobatic swifts screech
across evening clouds.
jackdaws call from the
red crags above the city -
bagpipes in the gorse.
Viewpoints for One Deep Breath
aerobatic swifts screech
across evening clouds.
jackdaws call from the
red crags above the city -
bagpipes in the gorse.
Viewpoints for One Deep Breath
15 comments:
Beautiful. I love watching birds... and so do my cats (I did a photo post about it recently called ''Meanwhile''). Unlike the cats, though, I don't wish to eat the birds.
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these are beautiful.
we have swallows and martins but i don't think i've seen swifts.
jackdaws are not very common either (gooded crows prevail) but i have seen a few...
Lovely haikus! They really are perfect little snapshots -- I love the movement and sound of the birds, and the visual details of clouds and crags -- plus the wondrous sound of bagpipes! Oh, and it was great to click the links and get to read about the swifts and jackdaws -- thank you!
I like them both, especially the first one. The imagery of the swifts, wonderful.
Wonderful haiku with that Edinburgh flavor...loved them.
Having been to Edinburgh, I can really picture these haiku... the gorse, the crags above the city, the birds. Thanks for the beautiful reminder of a lovely time!
These both call forth images of places which I've never had the chance to visit - yet. Swifts and bagpipes, great.
I love those images and I am not familiar with those names. I love learning new words....like 'gorse'.
Love your Scottish words! I have read about Jackdaws in books but have never looked them up. Thanks for including the bird info, so interesting. You poems create a setting I would like to see someday.
Very nice. I love bagpipes. That was a nice thing to include. I like your diction. It makes you very unique.
Juliet,
I like how you are so good at expressing your observations with picture perfect haiku.
I stood on the stoop tonight after supper and marveled at the aerial circus the riot of birds provided.
rel
every word built the picture...felt like I was there... a swooping good job
yes, megan stole the words form my mouth (or rather from my keyboard!) ~ you painted a fantastic picture of these bird's eye views :)
What I really liked about the poetry was that I didn't need a photo to accompany it. You made the viewpoint appear for me.
hanulf - thanks for letting me know about your posts - I enjoyed reading them!
Polona - we have lots of hooded crows in Scotland too.
Clare, Sandy - glad you used the links, I'm trying to remember to add them where I think its useful.
Beaman, Tammy - thanks
Regina - glad they brought back some nice memories!
Quietpaths, Ron - thanks!
Chris - we're all unique!
Rel, Megan, Becoming Amethyst, Patois - thanks!
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