This looked so simple at first. The mark of a fine Haiku, so much evoked in the image of distant thunder from the dove's view, or ours. First I think of the rumbling on the train tracks one feels before the train is visible. The thunder from a phone line, distant perhaps as we use landlines less and less and internet/cell phone more. The dove, of course, the opposite of war, waiting for the thunder to approach.... it takes time and review to read poetry...(sigh) Di
I love this. Though not explicitly stated, you can feel the dove (and the thin telephone wire beneath it) quivering with the sound and reverberations from the thunder.
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This looked so simple at first.
The mark of a fine Haiku, so much evoked in the image of distant thunder from the dove's view, or ours. First I think of the rumbling on the train tracks one feels before the train is visible.
The thunder from a phone line, distant perhaps as we use landlines less and less and internet/cell phone more.
The dove, of course, the opposite of war, waiting for the thunder to approach....
it takes time and review to read poetry...(sigh)
Di
I have watched doves in the weather, they seem very sensitive to conditions.
I love seeing any kind of bird, or birds on telephone wires.
all my best,
Alan, With Words
2010 With Words Haiku Competition: weblink
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Excellent haiku - so much in so little!
I love this. Though not explicitly stated, you can feel the dove (and the thin telephone wire beneath it) quivering with the sound and reverberations from the thunder.
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