Growing pains in their necks and legs
taller than the rest
at what point did the herd reject
begone giraffes - you are not of us
or did they just diverge
antelopes grazing, eyes to the ground
giraffes browsing, looking upwards
moving imperceptibly apart
until one moment they realised
they were strangers?
originally posted on this blog in July 2008 for Totally Optional Prompts
Meanwhile there's a second chance to read my poem Art House which I've just reposted over on my Shapeshifting Green blog here.
19 comments:
Ha very cool. Once again an original idea, perfectly crafted poem with something to say and beautifully executed,
you do so well with prompts--good stuff
Lovely, this is so good.
Paul, d.moll - thanks
Scot - I like using prompts, I was sceptical when i started using them but now I find they're a really useful source of inspiration, though I know not everyone likes them
This is WONDERFUL!!! Love your thoughts on that moment when a giraffe became a giraffe. Wow!
Yeah, good take on the prompt - and just to think about that 'moment'..
wow. love the poem.
don't we all feel like giraffes at some point in life?
Bravo, lovely! Couldn't think of anything for this one...
I like the prompts too, also because they make me get out more. I couldn't keep up with the number some people do though.
This is so easily relatable (new word :) to we humans. Excellent Juliet.
Very poignant. It was a poem and an allegory, presented in a handful of lines.
I am loving these prompts although, I have only just stumbled upon T O P.
By Beautiful African senyru is up at my place:
http://bevies-place.livejournal.com/31683.html
Bev
A prompt can provide authorization to innovate. Nicely done.
Loved that. Seemed lighthearted at first, but with a deep message in there.
Nicely worded and layered!
I really like this poem. It reminds me when my youngest did a growth spurt and she was all legs; like some young pony. It is how I remember her most at that age; all giraffe like and awkward. Thanks for that memory.
I did receive your comment on my blog the other day but it did not arrive in email. I know that others are having problems with my info email bouncing back and refusing to let them post. Is this happening to you?
Beautiful -- a unique take on change and time.
It's always good to be your own person, even if it's different.
I'm with anthony - at first I thought.. "Oh! This is sweet", and then I thought, "Hey now... this is deep" - mark of a good one there!
Very nice, with significant expression.
A nice read, thank you.
All the best Jan
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