Friday, 4 July 2008

The First Giraffe

Growing pains in their necks and legs
taller than the rest

at what point did the herd reject

begone giraffes - you are not of us

or did they just diverge

antelopes grazing, eyes to the ground
giraffes browsing, looking upwards

moving imperceptibly apart
until one moment they realised
they were strangers?


The First Giraffe for Totally Optional Prompts

17 comments:

PaulS said...

Ha very cool. Once again an original idea, perfectly crafted poem with something to say and beautifully executed,

Scot said...

you do so well with prompts--good stuff

d. moll, l.ac. said...

Lovely, this is so good.

Crafty Green Poet said...

Paul, d.moll - thanks

Scot - I like using prompts, I was sceptical when i started using them but now I find they're a really useful source of inspiration, though I know not everyone likes them

egretsnest said...

This is WONDERFUL!!! Love your thoughts on that moment when a giraffe became a giraffe. Wow!

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Yeah, good take on the prompt - and just to think about that 'moment'..

polona said...

wow. love the poem.
don't we all feel like giraffes at some point in life?

Lucy said...

Bravo, lovely! Couldn't think of anything for this one...

I like the prompts too, also because they make me get out more. I couldn't keep up with the number some people do though.

Janice Thomson said...

This is so easily relatable (new word :) to we humans. Excellent Juliet.

bevies-place said...

Very poignant. It was a poem and an allegory, presented in a handful of lines.

I am loving these prompts although, I have only just stumbled upon T O P.
By Beautiful African senyru is up at my place:
http://bevies-place.livejournal.com/31683.html

Bev

HL said...

A prompt can provide authorization to innovate. Nicely done.

anthonynorth said...

Loved that. Seemed lighthearted at first, but with a deep message in there.

tumblewords said...

Nicely worded and layered!

AscenderRisesAbove said...

I really like this poem. It reminds me when my youngest did a growth spurt and she was all legs; like some young pony. It is how I remember her most at that age; all giraffe like and awkward. Thanks for that memory.

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Nathan said...

Beautiful -- a unique take on change and time.

Noah the Great said...

It's always good to be your own person, even if it's different.

texasblu said...

I'm with anthony - at first I thought.. "Oh! This is sweet", and then I thought, "Hey now... this is deep" - mark of a good one there!