Tuesday 2 December 2008

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under the oak tree -
broken acorns lie scattered
on a rock.

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I've joined the team for Winter Haiku, you can read my first contribution here.

15 comments:

Anonymous said...

I picture blue jays in the scene. Do you have them there?

http://www.birds.cornell.edu/AllAboutBirds/BirdGuide/Blue_Jay.html

We have small oaks coming up all over the yard from their acorn planting.

Crafty Green Poet said...

Hi fourwinds, no we don't have blue jays, though we have a different kind of jay, which may have been responsible!

Unknown said...

I can hear the dry sounds there - possibly with the cackle of a Jay in the trees!

Rachel Green said...

Lovely. I can see that so well.

Anonymous said...

I like them both :D

Scot said...

nice haiku

Janice Thomson said...

One can see this so well.
The squirrels have been busy perhaps?

Unknown said...

Nice! At my house, I would let those broken acorns sprout - I love oak trees!!!

Anonymous said...

I deeply appreciate your close connection to the natural world and the way your poetry keeps us steadily connected to it, as well. Bless you, my dear.

Anonymous said...

Such a wonderful image. Off to check out Winter Haiku.

Devika Jyothi said...

Hi CGP!

This to me seemed very straight...
scene straight from life...

but somehow, I am failing to have a perceptive reading...

would love to know if there's a deeper connotation to it..

wishes,
devika

polona said...

somebody helped itself to a meal?
lovely

Crafty Green Poet said...

Devika - your comment is interesting, many times I think one person's 'haiku moment' is someone else's 'so what?' and that's valid. For me this haiku was about mystery, my partner and I stopped and saw the acorns and wondered where they came from, because its not necessarily obvious....

Anonymous said...

I just read it, and I love it! I also love this one. There's something about acorns that makes me feel warm, and you have captured that feeling perfectly. Your haiku is beautiful.

Anonymous said...

Interesting how some people pictured the jays (or whoever may have been responsible for the acorn fragments) right away, while others were left with an incomplete sense of the image. It's nice the way the comments add to the life of the poem.

Love the way the winter haiku site pulls the reader right into the feel of a snowy place. Made me shiver.