Friday 28 November 2008

Leaves for Weekend Wordsmith

the garden steps
hidden under fallen leaves -
a blackbird calls


Leaves for Weekend Wordsmith

12 comments:

Rachel Green said...

Fabulous. I can see it so clearly.

Dave King said...

Lovely. A bit naughty - I like that: the first two lines suggest some impending misfortune and the last just totally ignores it and goes off elsewhere. Delicious.

Art and Poetry said...

It does draw a nice picture!

Doug P. Baker said...

Do those leaves bother the blackbird? I wonder. Is he calling you to clean them up, or calling friends to come play in them with him? I'll have to watch the blackbirds in my back yard to see.

The Weaver of Grass said...

Nice image.

Janice Thomson said...

I love watching them scratch midst the leaves for worms and insects. Wonderful image Juliet.

Anonymous said...

Really nice. Love the blackbird at the end.

polona said...

a warning?
anyway, a lovely image.

Devika Jyothi said...

Very mysterious,
but a nice imagery...


wishes,
devika

Gemma Wiseman said...

Moving from an artificially? serene image of the changing season, the image of a blackbird calling almost sounds ominous, warning of don't let prettiness fool you!

Interesting haiku!

Anonymous said...

I like this one, too, Juliet. The tension of the steps being hidden under the leaves, then the unexpected ending that directs you away from the first two lines. It makes you turn your head towards the blackbird. Thanks to you, I've been educating myself on the haiku so I don't sound totally ignorant on the subject :)

~Nancy (Every Photo)

Anonymous said...

I loved this. So short, but really tells the story.