creative thinking ~ greener living
There is something very sensual about your choice of words in this poem. All the "L" sounds bring every line together wonderfully. And the image is lovely.
"this languid day is the full eternityof their lives"Amazing!
Expressive and thoughtful, a wonderful poem for bringing the mind's eye into focus.
I found that very calming. Lovely.
I love this poem, particularly the lines noah picks out. Just a suggestion - would explicitly mentioning on the swallows' longer perspective bring out the the mayflies' short lives even more?
I like the alliteration - it moves the poem forward but not hurriedly. your few words evoke a strong image
Such a short poem--perfect for a mayfly--but with words to savor and linger over!
This feels so summery. You caught the spirit of life in the heat perfectly.
a birds eye view of momentary eternity...awesome
What beautiful reflections on the short life of the beautiful mayfly - I loved this Juliet.
Great images here - I take it Mayflies don't live very long.
Has a nice dreamy feel. Enjoyable! :)
A beautiful poem. The last three lines open it up for contemplation of time.
wow, wonderful poem, the one to savour like a summer day...and the relativity of time is stunning, although the imago is only a very small part of a mayfly's life. but it is an essential one...
Beautifully worded. I liked reading it aloud.tears trickle slowly
You are so talented!
terrific title, I like that "mayfly time."
Lovely. Thanks for dropping by at the Cafe. Nice to have found you here.
as contemplative as a cloud building in warm afternoon.
very summery! i like the illiteration and the movement of time--sun lives long, then birds, then the briefness of the mayfly...puts things into perspective
Beautiful. I especially like how "Heat hazes the sky" prepares us for the change of focus to a day as an eternity for a mayfly.
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