Sunday, 30 December 2007

tanka - frost

From a frosty Christmas Day walk through Princes Street Gardens, Edinburgh:

trees
glitter white
with frost -
greenfinches glow
like emeralds.

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frost glitters
on slippery pathways -
hand in hand
we feel safer
from falling.


A senryu on a different aspect of frost is on my Alter Ego blog.

Frost for One Deep Breath

27 comments:

CyberCelt said...

Beautiful. Of course, it is all sunshine and 50s in Texas, but I can imagine . . .

Jessica said...

I love your word choices. Glitter and glow sound so pretty.

Fabrizio - ikol22 said...

Buon Anno !

Sandy Carlson said...

Oh, that's lovely. Thanks for stirring my imagination on this frosty evening. God bless.
http://craftygreenpoet.blogspot.com/2007/12/tanka-fros

Roswila said...

Really love that first one. Can just see the lovely contrasts and glitterings. Thanks!

the laughing gypsy said...

warm words from a chilly prompt. thanks! A Laughing Gypsy

Janice Thomson said...

These are beautiful Juliet - love the pivot in the first one. Excellent.

my backyard said...

I especially like your 2nd poem for the sense of personal connection.

tumblewords said...

Nicely done, each carries weight and image.

Ričardas said...

...and I'm scrubbing my car windows to see this beauty :)
Happy New Year!

mm said...

I like the second one particularly too. Cold and danger contrasting with connection and warm hands.

Happy Hogmanay,CGP

spacedlaw said...

I love you little feathery emeraulds.

Writer and Artist on Board said...

may all of your falls be safe in the new year, Juliet. lovely. yes. stay green and crafty...

Inland Empire Girl said...

Perfect words. I can just imagine it! Happy New Year!

KG said...

Happy new year, Crafty! All the best in 2008.

AscenderRisesAbove said...

no frost here... i need to come to your blog to visualize it!

ascenderrisesabove.com/wordpress

Jo said...

Both are lovely, especially the sentiment in the second. Happy 2008Juliet!

this is my patch said...

How a few words can conjure up such a picture. I do hope you have lots more inspiration in 2008, a happy new year to you. x

Crafty Green Poet said...

cybercelt - sunshime and 50s sounds good at the minute!

Jessica - thanks!

Fabrizio - buon anno anche a te!

Sandy, Roswila, laughing gypsy, tumblewords, ricardas, mm, spacedlaw, writer and artist, inaldn empire girl, kg, jo, this is my patch - thanks!

Janice - I'm still getting the hang of writing tanka - so a particular thanks for that!

my backyard - thanks, yes that's what I was going for in that one!

Jane Poe (aka Deborah) said...

You've captured the frost beautifully. I love the contrast of colour in the first stanza & the emotion in the second. Peace, love and happiest new year wishes. JP/deb

qualcosa di bello said...

both are so gorgeous...makes me want to hop a flight to scotland!

happy new year!

Abzdragon said...

I love the greenfinches representing emeralds <3 Beautiful.

Clare said...

Hi Crafty! The white and green in the first one creates a really beautiful image, and I also love the feeling of connection and support in the second one. Really nice frosty tankas!
:)

Quiet Paths said...

These are delightful. I esp. like the second how it warms the heart.

Jone said...

I can see you walking hand in hand on the slippery pathways. Lovely. And greenfinches now they would be fun to see.

Sandy said...

Your tanka is so colorful...it is so easy to imagine the greenfinches and the trees glittering with frost...absolutely lovely.

S

daisies said...

so incredibly beautiful!