Monday, 26 February 2007

Haiku - colour

snow melts
under spring blue skies -
purple crocus.


fallen stars
in a carpet of green -
yellow celandines.



Colour for One Deep Breath

26 comments:

bgfay said...

That first one strikes me as an especially good one because of its simplicity on the surface. I read through it and nod, "yes, yes, I see that," and then the image comes into my mind just as the snow melting reveals that flower.

I can't get my head going on this prompt yet. I hope it will come to me.

GeL (Emerald Eyes) said...

A lovely haiku palette

gaby said...

I love haikus and specially your colour haikus. I can see the blue sky and the crokus.
Wonderful!
:-)
gaby

http://gaby-cajubrasil.blogspot.com

Liza Lee Miller said...

Ooooo, I love them both! The last one spoke to me particularly well, though. The green carpet, I think.

Brian said...

You paint a colorful carpet here. Thanks. :)

What is a celandine?

Remiman said...

Juliet,
This is really scary; Just before I clicked to your page I thought to myself, "I think Juliet will describe crocus."
I liked the promise foretold in both your haiku.
rel

AscenderRisesAbove said...

stars falling on a carpet; what an interesting thought!

Regina Clare Jane said...

Those crocus sure are hopeful!
I loved both hiakus!

polona said...

lovely, especially the first one!

Sandy said...

I really love the first one. So simple and so beautiful.

Tammy said...

Beautiful spring images!

Becca said...

A perfect picture of the colors of spring.

Lovely~ as always!

Follow My Ink said...

...this was very nice. You painted a perfect picture with your Haiku's.

Jodi said...

I can see the colors of your haiku. Lovely, as usual.

Neasa said...

I love the surprise of the crocus. Every year it's like the first time I've ever seen them.

jem said...

For me the strength of these is in the contrast you create of one colour among another. Very visual.

Shelley said...

So vibrant!

Jone said...

Your haiku speaks so much of the promise of spring. I especially love the vision of fallen stars.

paris parfait said...

Nice images of spring to come; I like the "fallen stars in a carpet..."

Crafty Green Poet said...

Thanks for all your comments.

Brian (and anyone else who's wondering) a celandine is a small yellow star like flower that comes out in Scotland usually at the end of February.

Remiman, that's funny, I was writing about crocuses even before i saw the prompt...

cloudscome said...

These are really lovely!

whitney said...

Wonderful Haiku! I could picture them both in my mind, and they are very colorful.

liquidquick said...

i love the imagery of the second one. pieces of stars falling onto green carpet. nicely done.

susanlavonne said...

these haiku are truly a work of art...just incredible!

megan said...

you captured spring in a handful of words...i can almost smell it

sarala said...

Makes me long for spring. No crocus here yet. Not even snowdrops.