Monday, 12 February 2007

Haiku - Shelter

dark sky glowers
over endless heather -
one white-washed cottage.
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woven nest of sticks,
covered with lichen and moss -
four small eggs.
Shelter for One Deep Breath.

21 comments:

Star said...

love the "woven" nest

Jacquie said...

Nice! The image in the first haiku struck me as especially vivid.
(Thanks for visiting my blog. By the way, I left a link to your snowdrop haiku in the comments of my first one, which I hope is okay.)

Crafty Green Poet said...

Hi Star and jacquie - thanks for your comments - and the link jacqui, lovely, thanks!

MB said...

That first one is so strongly visual for me. Lovely.

Helen said...

i love these... especially the woven nest of sticks.
always enjoy your haikus:)

shadowsandclouds said...

ahh, they're great, i especially prefer the first - this morning i was having breakfast in a big wooly fisherman's jumper and thinking of being in brittany last summer, now i read your white-washed cottage haiku and i soooo want to be back there - encapsulates it all in those three lines! thanks! havea a good day

Sandy said...

A cottage with heather! I am jealous. These are both nice.

Mikim said...

Really like both of these! Wonderful image you've painted with the first haiku, I can picture that little white cottage, heather and all in my mind. ~nicely done.

Tiffany said...

Both are nice, but I love the idea of sticks sheltering the egss.

Regina Clare Jane said...

The woven nest of sticks really did it for me... it's just so heartwarming...

Becca said...

Beautiful word picture - four small eggs nestled in their shelter of woven sticks.

Lovely, as always!

rhino said...

how wonderful the fields of heather must be

paris parfait said...

These are both lovely! Wish I could see those heather fields (other than in my mind's eye).

Tammy said...

You have imprinted lovely images in my head :)

Jone said...

I can just see these haiku. BTW if I can get a photo of the towhees, I will upload them to my site.

ku said...

such strong images! wonderful ku.

megan said...

I love poetry that evokes a sigh at how well the image comes through. Both of these did that for me. Very nice. Thanks.

QAZSE said...

your haiku awakens the sense of coziness in me - I can see the smoke rising gently from the chimney while the mother tends to her nest.

regards

Neasa said...

Yes, coziness is exactly the right word for what these haiku evoke. I love the lichen & moss imagery.

get zapped said...

Splendid haiku! I smiled and kept smiling. Wonderful - thank you.

liquidquick said...

first one makes me think of a half-way rest stop on a long trip. for the second one, i like the contrast between old and new with the moss covered nest and the eggs.