Tuesday 21 July 2009

Summer storm

flash of lightning
-moment of silence-
thunder crash

clouds fray into rain
water shines slate roofs

gulls flash almost golden
in the low light

17 comments:

PurestGreen said...

Oh my. Did you just write this? About the storm that just passed? How eerie - I just wrote about this storm as well.

I love the last two lines.

poefusion said...

Your the second person I've read to have had a storm today. It's been 82 here and hot. Your storm sounds nice though. Love the poem tribute. Have a great day.

Anonymous said...

This reminds me of the huge thunder storms we had when we lived in Kentucky! You just sent be back in time with this one! I love it!! :)

Rachel Fox said...

We get very few big storms in Angus but had the huge one last night. Amazing lightshow and what seemed to be buckets of water being thrown at our window! Exciting...
x

Forthvalley scribe said...

I like the shiny slates and golden gulls. Odd, but right, to think of storms as full of light!

Gerald (Ackworth born) said...

rain slides on slate

no thunderstorms yesterday but lots of rain here.

Susan Richardson said...

I love the golden gulls and the fraying of the clouds. I got caught in a couple of thunderstorms last week in Norfolk - very dramatic!

something else said...

thanks for you comment :-) you are right i have found that keyboard and mouse have been on the hunt for our friends. yesterday's post was fabulous. i am not much of a poet myself but i have dabbled once or twice before. but you write beautifully especially this on last night's storm.

Anonymous said...

Mmmmmm, frayed clouds. LOVE it!

Paul said...

Perfect, the clarity of a photograph.

Anonymous said...

I grew up with violent thunder storms down in tornado alley, also known as the state of Oklahoma. The first poem is perfect. As kids, we would try to see how far we count count in between the rumble and the flash.

Hey, I think I might use that phrase in a poem!

☆sapphire said...

I love this poem!! Very picturesque!
The rainy season is not over yet here. We had a thunderstorm yesterday. But I always like to see the shiny slates and flying birds in the sky after the rain.

Raph G. Neckmann said...

I love the imagery of 'gulls flash almost golden'.

Lynne (aka Gel) said...

Yum. I like this one a lot. especially "clouds fray into rain"/
water shines slate roofs"

and "gulls flash almost golden"

Jenn Jilks said...

Thanks for visiting My Muskoka! I am glad you liked my turtle.

He was immobile, and I am hoping he will inspire a poem.

Great reading yours - more inspiration! I have no day job, so there is no reason not to be prolific.

P.S. Watch for a post I am working on. It is a comedy, and will use your name in vain!

Jinksy said...

I could see the eerie, orange light that storms sometimes engender...

Julie said...

This is so beautiful! I love it. I especially love the rain on the slate roofs and, of course, the gulls and clouds. Absolutely beautiful:)