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****************************bright white moon hangsin the blue velvet night –bats fly from the eaves
Moonstruck for One Deep Breath - Happy First Birthday!
i really liked these. they reminded me of this poem by average poet as well...http://averagepoet.blogspot.com/2007/05/glowing.html
Most lovely... the moon that drifts through our days and our dreams.
It's Tuesday in Scotland!
nice contrast in both haiku.
thanks for visiting me, i really like your blog & shall stop by again
Thanks Brian, I'll go and read the link. l.l.barkat - thanks!Kevin Doran - lol! It is now! Sometimes I juggle dates to avoid lots of posts on one day. Now I've been found out!Polona - thanks!Pangolin - thanks, hope to 'see' you again soon!
Hi Crafty,I love seeing the moon in daylight. I've never lost my fascination with the view.Hope you are well.
Thanks Brian - yes it always fascinates me too! I'm well thanks, hope you are too.
moon floats and moon hangs- so descriptive! Love these poems!
Hey just stopping by! Luv your vision of the MOON! Nice haiku!!!
They are both lovely but I really love that second one.
Oh- "blue velvet night"... that is such an exquisite expression... and I can see those bats, too!
Love them both but particularly the swifts and bats that fly through them. Fantastic!
I like how your haiku always have some moment of action placed neatly in with the still portrait. Very lovely.
I love your moonstruck theme and I can picture that white moon hanging in the black velvet.
Beautiful imagery... I have never written haiku, but would like to try... any advice for a novice? :)
Love the summery imagery. This evokes memories growing up on the East coast.
OK... I tried a couple. How'd I do?! ;)
very nice contrast of pale vs bright. delightful haiku
love the contrast. Moon jumps out. love the transition to the bats and the swifts. beautiful
I especially like the second one, with the surprise at the end. This is one of the things that makes haiku so wonderful and so unique and is a mark of good writing.Thanks
These are beautiful, delicate yet strong. I'm a sucker for moon imagery. Decided to have a go at one deep breath myself, have been watching from the sidelines for a while now...
Such brilliant images appear to me of the day moon and the night moon. Beautiful haiku.
Love that first one. I adore the moon, but particularly day moons. And my spirit soars with those birds. :-)
I love the day moon poem, but I really found the contrast of the second one most appealing.
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