One Deep Breath's prompt this week is to write haiku or related verses about simple pleasures. This first one is a very autumnal pleasure, particularly for the little ones:
Crisp autumn air – small boots kick bright coloured leaves on the path.
These next two relate to when I lived in Malawi:
Suppertime on the dusky verandah – cicadas call.
Sun sinks behind hills as lake merges with sky - fishing boats parade.
I was thinking the same thing...I want to live in your haiku. I think Malawi is now one of the places I want to visit! I love the word suppertime. Actually, I think I like each one of your words! But suppertime has so many memories!
i really like the way your first haiku reveals sounds without direct mention of them and the other two are so serene and "ahhhh" and again your descriptions reveal so much more than just the pictures they paint...lovely!
Hi there and thanks for all your comments! I hope you all get the chance this autumn to put some boots on and kick through the leaves, with your children (or nephews and nieces!) if you have any.
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Oh my. I want to live in your haiku. Lovely.
jb
inviting and beautiful, well done.
Beautiful imagery in your haiku. Malawi sounds heavenly!
I was thinking the same thing...I want to live in your haiku. I think Malawi is now one of the places I want to visit! I love the word suppertime. Actually, I think I like each one of your words! But suppertime has so many memories!
"small boots kick bright coloured leaves" brings back memories
i really like the way your first haiku reveals sounds without direct mention of them
and the other two are so serene and "ahhhh" and again your descriptions reveal so much more than just the pictures they paint...lovely!
Your haiku paint beautiful pictures. I still like to kick leaves, and jump on them and crunch them!
Simple pleasures written with a purity of thought!!
You are a master of creating the serene mood that is the essence of haiku. Lovely, as always :)
Love them all, but the first one, with the line about small boots and leaves brings back very special memories to me.
Lovely, all of them! I enjoy the same simple pleasures of the autumn, and your two about Malawi conjure some wonderful images.
Gorgeous - the pictures you paint with your haiku!
I Love all of these especially the 3rd one. "as lake merges with sky" I can just imagine this. :)
I am very fond of small boots kicking brightly colored leaves. That line pulled a lot of emotional weight for me.
Hi there and thanks for all your comments! I hope you all get the chance this autumn to put some boots on and kick through the leaves, with your children (or nephews and nieces!) if you have any.
And yes I'd recommend Malawi as a place to visit.
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