Monday, 23 October 2006

Haiku - mystery

One Deep Breath this week has asked us to write haiku with an air of mystery (the Japanese aesthetic Yugen). Here are two I have written on some of the mysteries of Autumn:


one golden leaf
floats slowly downriver –
harvest moon.


wide open sky
and empty mudflats –
bird calls come closer.

13 comments:

Jennifer said...

lovely, serene

Helen said...

Love .....the golden leaf floats slowly downriver
very lovely. This was a hard one to do.

Endment said...

You have caught the essence of the things I love about autumn.
Thank you

paris parfait said...

This haiku are so relaxing and lovely.

kerrdelune said...

Leaves and golden moons, skies, shores and singing birds - could anything come closer to the true spirit of yugen? Lovely. . .

Sandy said...

Your poems show a love of nature. Very pleasing to the senses.

Mike Mc said...

The two parts of your haiku inform each other nicely. I especially like the second, which reminds me of a mudflat I need to visit.

Jone said...

love the visual of a single golden leaf floating down stream.

Tammy said...

Beautiful imagery! I love watching leaves swirl and float :)

nancy bea said...

I like both of your poems but that first one is truly great. Incredibly balanced, elegant.

Catherine said...

Two beautiful haiku - it's difficult to encapsulate mystery in so few words, but I think you have done it.

Crafty Green Poet said...

HI and thanks for all your comments. And welcome to Crafty Green Poet to Jone and Nancy Bea.

Pearl said...

Midflats is a lovely tranquil setting.