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Monday, 23 October 2006

Haiku - mystery

One Deep Breath this week has asked us to write haiku with an air of mystery (the Japanese aesthetic Yugen). Here are two I have written on some of the mysteries of Autumn:


one golden leaf
floats slowly downriver –
harvest moon.


wide open sky
and empty mudflats –
bird calls come closer.

13 comments:

  1. Love .....the golden leaf floats slowly downriver
    very lovely. This was a hard one to do.

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  2. You have caught the essence of the things I love about autumn.
    Thank you

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  3. This haiku are so relaxing and lovely.

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  4. Leaves and golden moons, skies, shores and singing birds - could anything come closer to the true spirit of yugen? Lovely. . .

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  5. Anonymous10:33 pm

    Your poems show a love of nature. Very pleasing to the senses.

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  6. Anonymous10:39 pm

    The two parts of your haiku inform each other nicely. I especially like the second, which reminds me of a mudflat I need to visit.

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  7. Anonymous6:03 am

    love the visual of a single golden leaf floating down stream.

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  8. Beautiful imagery! I love watching leaves swirl and float :)

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  9. Anonymous7:32 pm

    I like both of your poems but that first one is truly great. Incredibly balanced, elegant.

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  10. Two beautiful haiku - it's difficult to encapsulate mystery in so few words, but I think you have done it.

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  11. HI and thanks for all your comments. And welcome to Crafty Green Poet to Jone and Nancy Bea.

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  12. Anonymous2:26 pm

    Midflats is a lovely tranquil setting.

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