On One Deep Breath this week we are asked to write a tanka. A tanka is a Japanese poetic form often written in the form of five lines with syllable counts of 5.7.5.7.7 though as with haiku the syllable count doesn't need to be strictly followed, though short, long, short, long long is to be preferred. Tanka often link the natural world with personal emotional reflections. Here then is my first attempt at a tanka:
hot summer weather
still in mid September
Unseasonable
I enjoy the heatwave
but worry what it means.
My second ever tanka appears at my Alter Ego blog here.
I like your combination of the obvious enjoyment of the moment, but concern for the future. Great tanka!
ReplyDeleteexcellent tanka!
ReplyDeletebut now you have me worried too.
I love the contrast between joy and worry.
ReplyDeleteI like both of your poems, but favor this one, as I am a lover of autumn.
ReplyDeleteYour tanka evokes my thoughts from early in the summer when we were unseasonably hot. I worried about what that would mean for the coming winter. You have expressed a universal concern.
ReplyDeletegorgeous tanka!!
ReplyDeleteand thanks for stopping by my blog :)
Wonderful tanka with more than one emotion. Cool!
ReplyDeleteHeatwave??? I think I'd like one of them, but something tells me my emotions would be mixed if I had my wishes granted.
ReplyDeleteHI there everyone - thanks for all the comments. Indeed, jvs, we are having a heatwave here in Edinburgh - we had one in July, and after a relatively cooler August we're having another now. If you like hot weather, its probably quite nice but its definitely worrying in terms of what's happening to the climate.
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