sky solid endless grey
rain sheets across the slates
of the roofs across the way
puddles ripple
not a bird in sight
just dipped headlights
and dull dreich
windblown drizzle
Originally posted for the theme of Ripple for Weekend Wordsmith back in 2008
At that time I also had a new haiku up on Winter Haiku. You can read it here
And now (ie in 2018) I have three poems up on Route 7, you can find them here, here and here.
19 comments:
I have to say this sounds lovely though I know it is meant otherwise but it's so darn cold here a little rain would be nice :)
Also enjoyed your haiku - liked the contrast between the frost and the summer flip-flops.
I like this a lot, C.G. You nailed it down like slate on a roof.
Had to look up dreich, but got it and it's fine.
Not a wasted word. The hard pounding cadence works well. An excellent tribute to a dismal day.
I like it. You certainly capture the grey dismal weather.
There's nothing like a good smirr!
Thanks for bringing us this grey day!
'dreich', what a word!
Your banners are an endless delight...
Something different .... Nice to see it. I have not come here before I don't think, but I will now. Thank you.
T
lovely images here julie! i especially love the phrase "puddles ripple".
ooops sorry for the typo! i meant juliet, not julie :)
very seasonal...
Good poem, CGP
wish you a Merry Christmas!
devika
I love the use of language in this. The imagery is just wonderful. What a fabulous poet you are!
This is exactly the kind of rain we have at the moment. It's good to be inside and have a nice cuppa! Listen to beautiful music and read the paper. Have a great weekend.
i liked this! wonderful imagery!
I think the repetition of the word 'across' in the first verse is effective. And the one line verses. Good one.
nice alliteration and terrific description "Dipped headlights/and dull dreich"
from my lovely Florida home, I just caught a chill and a bit of the blues-very nice!
Remembering my childhood in Seattle spending our days looking out the windows for it to stop, so we could out to play.
Great poem I enjoyed it...
dipped headlights
and dull drench .....
Yes, got it.
You definitely painted a mood. It reminds me of something my sister would have written.No birds though so I'm outta there!
I enjoyed 'Winter Rain'
All the best Jan
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