Friday, 19 December 2008

Winter Rain

sky solid endless grey
rain sheets across the slates
of the roofs across the way

puddles ripple

not a bird in sight
just dipped headlights
and dull dreich

windblown drizzle


Ripple for Weekend Wordsmith

I also have a new haiku up on Winter Haiku. You can read it here

17 comments:

Janice Thomson said...

I have to say this sounds lovely though I know it is meant otherwise but it's so darn cold here a little rain would be nice :)
Also enjoyed your haiku - liked the contrast between the frost and the summer flip-flops.

jack sender said...

I like this a lot, C.G. You nailed it down like slate on a roof.

Had to look up dreich, but got it and it's fine.

Not a wasted word. The hard pounding cadence works well. An excellent tribute to a dismal day.

The Weaver of Grass said...

I like it. You certainly capture the grey dismal weather.

Gordon Mason said...

There's nothing like a good smirr!

Thanks for bringing us this grey day!

Lucy said...

'dreich', what a word!

Your banners are an endless delight...

Inside our hands, outside our hearts said...

Something different .... Nice to see it. I have not come here before I don't think, but I will now. Thank you.

T

odessa said...

lovely images here julie! i especially love the phrase "puddles ripple".

odessa said...

ooops sorry for the typo! i meant juliet, not julie :)

Devika said...

very seasonal...
Good poem, CGP

wish you a Merry Christmas!

devika

Selma said...

I love the use of language in this. The imagery is just wonderful. What a fabulous poet you are!

Reader Wil said...

This is exactly the kind of rain we have at the moment. It's good to be inside and have a nice cuppa! Listen to beautiful music and read the paper. Have a great weekend.

How do we know said...

i liked this! wonderful imagery!

jem said...

I think the repetition of the word 'across' in the first verse is effective. And the one line verses. Good one.

gel said...

nice alliteration and terrific description "Dipped headlights/and dull dreich"

Library Girl said...

from my lovely Florida home, I just caught a chill and a bit of the blues-very nice!

George said...

Remembering my childhood in Seattle spending our days looking out the windows for it to stop, so we could out to play.

Great poem I enjoyed it...

mm said...

dipped headlights
and dull drench .....

Yes, got it.