Wednesday, 5 November 2008

From a Train Window

ploughed field -
two herons stand
motionless

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hay bales dot fields -
.......snow on distant hills

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dusk -
a thin mist lies
on the fields.

17 comments:

gingatao said...

That is beautiful. Classic English landscape poetry painting with just enough Japanese haiku influence to give depth and sensibility but still in motion through the train window. Beautiful.

Selma said...

I feel quite serene after reading this. Your poetry often does that to me. Your imagery is tender in this piece. A treat.

GORDON MASON said...

haiku glimpses from a train window really works. I like them....but should the print not be a bit shoogly?!

d. moll, l.ac. said...

Nice, I can hear the wheels on the track too.

The Weaver of Grass said...

Three lovely images from the train window.
The leaves on your banner are so restful I want them in front of my eyes all day!

polona said...

wonderful impressions, and more than that...

Dave said...

Very deftly done.

Janice Thomson said...

Excellent verses Juliet love the imagery of that last one so much.

Rabbits' Guy said...

Just the way it looks along our road these days ....

furrybutts said...

Lovely! I live in the city, with all that hustle and bustle. This piece just made me feel so serene & peaceful :) It's a nice feeling.

abz said...

I love writing about what I see out of car windows (or in this case... train) it's such a beautiful compilation of fleeting glimpses through glass.

jem said...

Great that you managed to capture such treasures on your way from A to B.

fourwindshaiga said...

I felt like I was looking out the window. I'll bet you enjoyed that ride.

Linda S. Socha said...

I love your blog! Thank you. I am glad to have found you. I enjoy the uplifting feeling your posts inspire. Thank you!
Linda

Jacqueline Pearce said...

I'm always amazed when such simple wording can evoke such vivid images. Nicely done! Makes me yearn for a contemplative train trip....

rivergardenstudio said...

Your poetry is lovely... Thank you for transforming me out into the misty fields with the heron! Roxanne

Scot said...

a haiku journal--no better way