Monday, 7 January 2008

haiku - moon

yellow moon
in pale blue sky -
frost

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white moon
in black sky -
owl calls


Moonstruck for One Deep Breath

26 comments:

polona said...

enchanting winter scenes!

Ackworth Born said...

I haven't heard an owl in a long time - thanks for the memory jog

Nancy Bea said...

Great visual imagery!

gardenpath said...

I love these tiny poems. They are harder to do, don't you think? The second one has a slight mystic touch, I like that.

Sandy

tumblewords said...

Both are visual - lovely. I'm particularly fond of the second - owls are magically connected to moons.

AnnieElf said...

Beautiful to imagine the dark shadow of an owl over a bright moon against a dark sky.

UL said...

yellow and white, blue and black, a beautiful combination, just like these haiku and how the opposites merge into a piece of beauty...thank you.

Sandy said...

I love the contrast between the colors of the moon and sky...it makes it so easy to "see" your haiku.

Janice Thomson said...

These are both lovely. I very much like the second one also because of the owl which is a bird I greatly admire.

Mandy said...

I love the second too but both are lovely

Sandy Carlson said...

You gave me the shivers! The moon certainly has its shades of personality--and brings out ours! God bless.

Crafty Green Poet said...

polona, ackworth, nancy, tumblewords, annie, ul, sandy, mandy - thanks

gardenpath - sometimes i find the shorter ku easier

sandy carlson - the moon certainly does have personality and yes i think she does affect us too

Plain Foolish said...

Both are lovely, but the first really speaks to me of winter mornings around here. Thank you.

Quiet Paths said...

Very vivid haiku. Owl and moon are perfect companions.

Krissie said...

I love your tiny haikus too..I am finding it hard not to get so wordy..so taking a leaf out of yur book...I think they have more impact when they are shorter!

watermaid said...

I love the simplicity of your haiku - so evocative.

qualcosa di bello said...

gorgeous winter beauty! the owl call & moonlight...what a wonderful night experience

Selma said...

Every time you haiku I am enchanted!

jem said...

Nice approach - to consider the differing colourings of the moon.

Roswila said...

These two work wonderfully well as a pair.

Jo said...

Oh the second one gave me chills, lovely, Juliet.

Secret Agent Mama said...

The second one is remarkable!

BB said...

These are so beautifully pared down and concise ~ what symmetry! ~ sent a little shiver down my spine.

LittleWing said...

hmm...the words you have chosen cause me to pause, close my eyes and see..beautiful

spacedlaw said...

Sounds like ancient country wisdom. nice.

TIV: the individual voice said...

These are lovely. I'm interested that Haiku syllable counts can vary. I wonder what the limitations are.