Tuesday, 9 January 2007

Another sky haiku

Grey clouds gather
In a troubled sky –
Lake ripples.



More subtle changes for One Deep Breath.

14 comments:

Brian said...

I like the image of the clouds rippled.

Paris Parfait said...

Have been trying to post a comment for ages, but Blogger was down. A gathering storm - wonderful poem!

G said...

Oooh, I like this; I can see the "lake ripples" in the sky. Lovely!

Tammy said...

I love how a storm slowly changes everything as it creeps in.

Roswila said...

I was just looking through old photos tonight and noticed reflections rippling in a lake photo I'd not noticed before. Thanks for delighting with more reflections and ongoing ripples.

Jone said...

We are expecting a storm here. It fits nicely.

AscenderRisesAbove said...

wonderful haiku; wish i could write those

Crafty Green Poet said...

Thanks for all your comments - Roswila - nice that you saw more reflections in your photos. Jone - I hope the storm wasn't too destructive. All we got here was drizzle that lastest all day.

Jane Poe (aka Deborah) said...

Beautiful poem, so subtle in your language.

cloudscome said...

Yes, it's really something how the sky and lake reflect and respond to each other. They both can change so rapidly! Good job!

megan said...

troubled sky...very nice!

AnnieElf said...

Ahhhh, two of my favorite images, grey skies and unsettled waters. I love a good rain shower.

And yes indeed, you were right to worry about my safety in the canyon. It could have ended so differently. If it were my daughter, and I found out, I would have grounded her for LIFE.

susanlavonne said...

subtle and powerful! for me the last line just nails it...j

Cate said...

I sooo appreciate your haikus! Each line in this one complements that others--what a perfect little piece.