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Sunday, 24 February 2008

Ink

ink black sky -
branches sway across
the moon

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wind
blows the branches
in the sky -
I fill my pen with ink
and stare at the empty page.


Ink for One Deep Breath

17 comments:

  1. Anonymous11:28 am

    I know all about that moment of staring at the blank page. It's a relief when it passes. Beautifully written.

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  2. This is a very nice pairing.

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  3. i like the connection between the sky & your muse...

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  4. I really like the tanka - I'm sure many can relate.

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  5. both work very well for me... branches in the haiku as if they want to erase the moon and a moment many can relate to well captured in the tanka

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  6. This feels like night is filling you pen with ink...

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  7. Anonymous6:49 pm

    I can relate to the empty page - sometimes nothing comes.

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  8. Yes, it happens like that! Nice parallels...

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  9. Ah to be like a tree reaching for the moon when it's time to write! These are wonderful.

    Writing in Faith: Poems

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  10. Your poems make me feel the loneliness of writing, the desire for beauty. I love them so much. Our submission can be found here. Thank you for visiting.

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  11. i guess we were thinking similarly with the first line in yours...your poem is much better than mine though...thank you.

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  12. Anonymous9:51 am

    I like the connection between the metaphorical in the first and the more down to earth blank page of the second.

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  13. cold moon
    branches scribbled
    on the sky

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  14. I really like the first one. Thanks goodness there will still be avenue for our haiku efforts!!!

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  15. The first one is so strong. Its like the branches are trying to dip the sky to write on the moon.

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  16. These both are very evocative and indicative of one's creative process.

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  17. Staring is so tiring. I'm always so glad when something clicks.

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