Regina - yes I do like swifts, they're my favourite birds and at this time of year they're the birds I see most from our flat. And yes the birds I write most poetry about!
Like polona, I can hear it. Ending on the verb "shriek" is the best possible choice, even though the haiku police will tell you haiku can't end with a verb.
i can hear them and imagine the scene...
ReplyDeleteI really like image/sound created by hearing the swift's shriek without seeing it -- kind of mysterious.
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I love swifts and the chittering noises they make.
ReplyDeleteLove it. (Do I always say that?)
ReplyDeleteThank you both for the haiku and for the link... wow.
ReplyDeleteI could hear the noise of those birds! Great haiku. :~)
ReplyDeleteYou like swifts, don't you?! Bird sounds are amazing when you can't actually see them!
ReplyDeleteI like the peaceful image in your haiku of birds settling down for the evening and being heard if not seen.
ReplyDeleteGreat image of the swift's hidden by nightfall. These few words paint a picture of nature, surely!
ReplyDeletethanks for all your comments.
ReplyDeleteRegina - yes I do like swifts, they're my favourite birds and at this time of year they're the birds I see most from our flat. And yes the birds I write most poetry about!
Oh my, so wonderful and brief. Good haiku!
ReplyDeleteI didn't realize that they made any noise. interesting.
ReplyDeleteWow...this is so crystal clear...like a diamond of words!
ReplyDeleteLike polona, I can hear it. Ending on the verb "shriek" is the best possible choice, even though the haiku police will tell you haiku can't end with a verb.
ReplyDeleteBill - sometimes the haiku rules are made to be broken!
ReplyDeleteMegan, Roswila - thanks!
Ascender - well I think your swifts are different from ours, ours certainly make noise, lots of it!
Thank you for the link to the audio, it added dimension to your haiku for me as I had never heard them.
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