One Deep Breath this week asks us to write haiku on 'the unseen'. Rather than taking any supernatural approach to this theme, Crafty Green Poet features haiku on invisible aspects of the natural environment:
a mix of gases
invisible but vital -
our atmosphere
darkness –
the scent of honeysuckle
fills the garden.
invisible but vital -
our atmosphere
darkness –
the scent of honeysuckle
fills the garden.
For a different interpretation of the theme, see my Alter Ego blog.
Wonderful reminders
ReplyDeletethe remembered scent of honeysuckle fills my mind :)
This is a hard one to say and yet you have done 2 of them perfectly. :)
ReplyDeleteAh, the scent of honeysuckle! Lots of that - and jasmine - in Sevilla. Lovely haiku!
ReplyDelete"scent of honeysuckle" lovely haiku... kudos
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comments folks - honeysucklie is so very evocative , isn't it? And Roswila, welcome to Crafty green POet - thanks for visiting!
ReplyDeleteI love the second one -it transmits the loveliness of summer nights perfectly!
ReplyDeletenice poems! a reminder that not all memories are visual
ReplyDeleteI didn't think of scents - perfect for the topic - rosemary is one of my favourites in summer
ReplyDeleteAtmosphere ~ a great topic for something unseen, yet vital to us all!
ReplyDeleteNicely done :)
wonderful reminders.
ReplyDeleteI love the honeysuckle one too. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteboth paragraphs are great...
ReplyDeletethough everybody can perceive differently atmosphere and darkness, ur description seem like extraordinarily precise and "right", even if there's not right and wrong perceptions in such subjective matters and meanings
ps i liked ur poem in the previous post also
thanx for ur kind wish in one of my posts
Ah! scents! I knew I was missing something. Great verses here.
ReplyDeletehoneysuckle, irresistible! I find haiku not so easy to write, but you clearly mastered it..keep it up ;)
ReplyDeleteI liked the first one on an intellectual level, but I really felt the second. One of my favourite fragrances.
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