Juliet. I am useless at haiku, so can't really comment on the form. But I like the structure of your poem very much: arrival, departure, and constant flight - as if there are no final arrivals and departures.
Thanks for all your comments! Swifts are my favourite bird and one of my favourite topics to write poetry about! They never seem to stop flying - they even sleep on the wing!
Juliet--thanks for your comments on Foothills Fancies, and the great tip about gull identification! I enjoyed the poetry magazine as well, and may be back to try my luck there sometime. I confess I borrowed the 'unhomed', will try to remember the proper author to credit.
Thanks S.L. I'd be delighted if you were to submit some poems to Bolts of Silk (that goes for anyone else reading this too!). I hope you can fit some names to those gulls!
HI there Tammy and paris Parfait - thanks for your comments. I think I'll find some info about swifts to post for those people who don't get the chance to see them, or who aren't birdwatchers. I write about them so often, it's only fair to let everyone know what I'm talking about!
Lovely - there are no swifts in New Zealand but I am reminded of the godwits which journey from Siberia and Alaska to New Zealand every year.
ReplyDeletebeautiful.
ReplyDeleteyou've painted a lovely picture with your words...it makes me with i could see them in reality :-)
ReplyDeleteWonderful word image! Truly lovely.
ReplyDeletesaw the magazine blog ...love the idea...
ReplyDeleteJuliet. I am useless at haiku, so can't really comment on the form. But I like the structure of your poem very much: arrival, departure, and constant flight - as if there are no final arrivals and departures.
ReplyDeleteThat's how it makes me think anyway.
Thanks for all your comments! Swifts are my favourite bird and one of my favourite topics to write poetry about! They never seem to stop flying - they even sleep on the wing!
ReplyDeleteJuliet--thanks for your comments on Foothills Fancies, and the great tip about gull identification! I enjoyed the poetry magazine as well, and may be back to try my luck there sometime. I confess I borrowed the 'unhomed', will try to remember the proper author to credit.
ReplyDeleteThanks S.L. I'd be delighted if you were to submit some poems to Bolts of Silk (that goes for anyone else reading this too!). I hope you can fit some names to those gulls!
ReplyDeleteLovely image you have given. I need to go look up a Swift to get the complete picture. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteOh this is a great Haiku! My husband is always watching the Swifts when they arrive/leave through the Bois du Boulogne.
ReplyDeleteHI there Tammy and paris Parfait - thanks for your comments. I think I'll find some info about swifts to post for those people who don't get the chance to see them, or who aren't birdwatchers. I write about them so often, it's only fair to let everyone know what I'm talking about!
ReplyDeleteI loved the haiku too!
ReplyDeleteA pity there are no Swifts in NZ, but plenty around Indian Head, 'k' Gari' (Fraser Island), a while back when I lived in Oz though! ;-)
No swifts, but plenty of Swallows:
clear sky
three four five swallows
spread out