This looked so simple at first. The mark of a fine Haiku, so much evoked in the image of distant thunder from the dove's view, or ours. First I think of the rumbling on the train tracks one feels before the train is visible. The thunder from a phone line, distant perhaps as we use landlines less and less and internet/cell phone more. The dove, of course, the opposite of war, waiting for the thunder to approach.... it takes time and review to read poetry...(sigh) Di
I love this. Though not explicitly stated, you can feel the dove (and the thin telephone wire beneath it) quivering with the sound and reverberations from the thunder.
This looked so simple at first.
ReplyDeleteThe mark of a fine Haiku, so much evoked in the image of distant thunder from the dove's view, or ours. First I think of the rumbling on the train tracks one feels before the train is visible.
The thunder from a phone line, distant perhaps as we use landlines less and less and internet/cell phone more.
The dove, of course, the opposite of war, waiting for the thunder to approach....
it takes time and review to read poetry...(sigh)
Di
I have watched doves in the weather, they seem very sensitive to conditions.
ReplyDeleteI love seeing any kind of bird, or birds on telephone wires.
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Alan, With Words
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Excellent haiku - so much in so little!
ReplyDeleteI love this. Though not explicitly stated, you can feel the dove (and the thin telephone wire beneath it) quivering with the sound and reverberations from the thunder.
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