sky solid endless grey
rain sheets across the slates
of the roofs across the way
puddles ripple
not a bird in sight
just dipped headlights
and dull dreich
windblown drizzle
Originally posted for the theme of Ripple for Weekend Wordsmith back in 2008
At that time I also had a new haiku up on Winter Haiku. You can read it here
And now (ie in 2018) I have three poems up on Route 7, you can find them here, here and here.
I have to say this sounds lovely though I know it is meant otherwise but it's so darn cold here a little rain would be nice :)
ReplyDeleteAlso enjoyed your haiku - liked the contrast between the frost and the summer flip-flops.
I like this a lot, C.G. You nailed it down like slate on a roof.
ReplyDeleteHad to look up dreich, but got it and it's fine.
Not a wasted word. The hard pounding cadence works well. An excellent tribute to a dismal day.
I like it. You certainly capture the grey dismal weather.
ReplyDeleteThere's nothing like a good smirr!
ReplyDeleteThanks for bringing us this grey day!
'dreich', what a word!
ReplyDeleteYour banners are an endless delight...
Something different .... Nice to see it. I have not come here before I don't think, but I will now. Thank you.
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lovely images here julie! i especially love the phrase "puddles ripple".
ReplyDeleteooops sorry for the typo! i meant juliet, not julie :)
ReplyDeletevery seasonal...
ReplyDeleteGood poem, CGP
wish you a Merry Christmas!
devika
I love the use of language in this. The imagery is just wonderful. What a fabulous poet you are!
ReplyDeleteThis is exactly the kind of rain we have at the moment. It's good to be inside and have a nice cuppa! Listen to beautiful music and read the paper. Have a great weekend.
ReplyDeletei liked this! wonderful imagery!
ReplyDeleteI think the repetition of the word 'across' in the first verse is effective. And the one line verses. Good one.
ReplyDeletenice alliteration and terrific description "Dipped headlights/and dull dreich"
ReplyDeletefrom my lovely Florida home, I just caught a chill and a bit of the blues-very nice!
ReplyDeleteRemembering my childhood in Seattle spending our days looking out the windows for it to stop, so we could out to play.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem I enjoyed it...
dipped headlights
ReplyDeleteand dull drench .....
Yes, got it.
You definitely painted a mood. It reminds me of something my sister would have written.No birds though so I'm outta there!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed 'Winter Rain'
ReplyDeleteAll the best Jan