Lovely. A bit naughty - I like that: the first two lines suggest some impending misfortune and the last just totally ignores it and goes off elsewhere. Delicious.
Do those leaves bother the blackbird? I wonder. Is he calling you to clean them up, or calling friends to come play in them with him? I'll have to watch the blackbirds in my back yard to see.
Moving from an artificially? serene image of the changing season, the image of a blackbird calling almost sounds ominous, warning of don't let prettiness fool you!
I like this one, too, Juliet. The tension of the steps being hidden under the leaves, then the unexpected ending that directs you away from the first two lines. It makes you turn your head towards the blackbird. Thanks to you, I've been educating myself on the haiku so I don't sound totally ignorant on the subject :)
Fabulous. I can see it so clearly.
ReplyDeleteLovely. A bit naughty - I like that: the first two lines suggest some impending misfortune and the last just totally ignores it and goes off elsewhere. Delicious.
ReplyDeleteIt does draw a nice picture!
ReplyDeleteDo those leaves bother the blackbird? I wonder. Is he calling you to clean them up, or calling friends to come play in them with him? I'll have to watch the blackbirds in my back yard to see.
ReplyDeleteNice image.
ReplyDeleteI love watching them scratch midst the leaves for worms and insects. Wonderful image Juliet.
ReplyDeleteReally nice. Love the blackbird at the end.
ReplyDeletea warning?
ReplyDeleteanyway, a lovely image.
Very mysterious,
ReplyDeletebut a nice imagery...
wishes,
devika
Moving from an artificially? serene image of the changing season, the image of a blackbird calling almost sounds ominous, warning of don't let prettiness fool you!
ReplyDeleteInteresting haiku!
I like this one, too, Juliet. The tension of the steps being hidden under the leaves, then the unexpected ending that directs you away from the first two lines. It makes you turn your head towards the blackbird. Thanks to you, I've been educating myself on the haiku so I don't sound totally ignorant on the subject :)
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I loved this. So short, but really tells the story.
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