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Monday, 16 June 2008

haiku - furnishings

curtains
sway in the breeze -
blackbirds sing.


furnishings for Mad Kane's Haiku Prompt

6 comments:

  1. nice image with movement and sound!

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  2. very summery. i like it.

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  3. You might want to vary the construction; "curtains sway . . . blackbirds sing"

    curtains sway
    in the summer breeze
    a song of blackbirds

    but that's just a thought. Ignore it if it gets in your way.

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  4. Anonymous12:30 pm

    Your haiku is lovely. It's a form of poetry that I am having fun with right now.

    Thanks for dropping by my livejournal and leaving a message.

    http://bevies-place.livejournal.com/27370.html

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  5. bill - good point, though I'm not sure if song of blackbirds would be waht i'd go for, but I'll think about it...

    Scot, Odessa, Jade, Bevies Place - thanks

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