a fish flaps its fins in the midst
of the desert while the city
drowns under the rising sea
a crow sings a song on the edge
of the forest while houses
grow leaves and crumble to ashes
a dark shadow looms and hangs tall
in the sky; while a small
golden butterfly emerges from gloom.
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This sounds like what the world might be if we continue to mess up. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteI agree. Perhaps it's not that surreal at all. Lovely piece.
ReplyDeleteas surreal as it seems, it is the truth isnt it?. Very nicely done.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed the contrasting ideas and as already mentioned feel this carries a touch of realism too. Definitely makes one think. Good one Juliet.
ReplyDeleteThe second stanza is breath taking. they say magic is based on potent contrast of images.
ReplyDeleteA wonderful study in contrast, apocalyptic in sentiment. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteIn the darkness we find the brightest light.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful.
God bless the butterflies ....
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A post-apocalyptic vision? Or just pay-back?
ReplyDeleterethabile, selma - thanks, that's what I intended.
ReplyDeleteul - yes its the truth! thanks
crimsonflaw, janice, billy - thanks
noah - yes I did want there to be hope at the end too...
rabbits guy - and the bunnies, yes!
stan - good question...
I don't see surrealism here. This poem reads like an effective piece of verse polemic and well worth winging off to one of the environmental activist magazines.
ReplyDeleteI like the golden butterfly image - a sort of ressurection?
ReplyDeletenow all i need is the painting it is interpreting... and i am all set... you definitely captured the very core of surrealism with this....
ReplyDeletethanks dick but its now published here so might not be accepted elsewhere... and surrealism is to an extent in the eye of the beholder, I wanted something that might appear surreal but isn't so you're right, its not
ReplyDeletePaisley - the painting only exists in my mind...
sweet talking guy - yes a sort of ressurection at the end
Very strong images of destruction. I like it a lot!
ReplyDeletea disturbing vision of reality.
ReplyDeletehope in the end? i wonder...
excellent
How wonderful that a golden butterfly emerges...certainly far more than we deserve! Great piece!
ReplyDeletei absolutely loved this poem, so very creative, so very fantasy-like, so very magical!
ReplyDeleteexcellent...
Nice poem, Crafty. I"m not totally sure what makes surreal surreal, but you've written a very clear set of pictures.
ReplyDeleteI really like this one because it's surreal but it also makes sense! And that ending...perfection!
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ReplyDeleteAs I was saying, this is very well done. Your images are very disturbing until the "golden butterfly. You have such a hopeful heart.
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great poem and such a great vision of disaster i can only hope this poem will only be sureall and not our future
ReplyDeletethis is a simply lovely poignant poem...so evocative...
ReplyDeleteI am a bit too busy with my work now, which will continue, so couldn't visit your blog for sometime...anyway, I will check your other posts later whenever I will get the break.
Surreal can often be straight-forward - too straight-forward for us to understand, me thinks.
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