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Monday, 22 October 2007

tanka - closeness

two wagtails
chase each other
downstream -
hand in hand, we watch
from the green footbridge.


Closeness for One Deep Breath

29 comments:

  1. Lovely, lovely, lovely.

    I really love the parallelism! Excellent job!

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  2. oh, you've captured a beautiful image here!

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  3. I like the merged, yet separate, image here - and I wikipedia'd wagtails...:)

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  4. Beautiful Juliet - the imagery this gives so delightful.

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  5. Beautiful. This reminds me of the times I've watched birds, or fish, or turtles from a bridge.

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  6. Anonymous5:00 am

    Your site is a great place to learn new words it seems, embedded in your posts.
    I can't think of a better way to spend time together than in watching nature.
    Wagtails?

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  7. Ron - normally I would include a link to the bird, but there are different types of wagtail...

    Liza, Greggo, ackworth born, tumblewords, rae, janice - thanks!

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  8. Nice feeling of contentment in there.

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  9. closeness of fish, and of two people and their awarenss of nature's reflections. Well done

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  10. Thanks Judy, wagtails are birds. I should go back and add a link anyway...

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  11. Oh, such a clear image - and I love the connections throughout. This is simply gorgeous.

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  12. Anonymous4:18 pm

    I was expecting to see a duck! I love the poem and the way you put this together.

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  13. perfect balance of closeness within & without

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  14. Anonymous6:38 pm

    Very lovely image brought to one's eye. And, I learned something! Thank you.

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  15. Anonymous7:18 pm

    I love the playfulness. Great imagery.

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  16. So love the moment you captured! Your work is wonderful. Jodi

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  17. Sandy - glad I went back to add the link then!

    Plain Foolish - thanks, it was connections I was after!

    Barone, Get Zapped, Qualcosa di bello, Christine - thanks!

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  18. This is very good indeed.

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  19. Anonymous3:09 pm

    aww what a wonderful image that leaves in your mind, you are so skilled at this type of writing

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  20. A striking image of intimacy, both in the hand in hand contact and, more profoundly, in the shared experience. And now, in sharing with us, you bring us within the circle of intimacy.

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  21. I could visualize it so clearly...just beautiful. :~)

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  22. Anonymous3:44 am

    This means so much to me as I can see wagtails frolicking on my lawn from my study. They are such cheeky wee things. A friend of mine calls them 'little spirit catchers' which I think comes from Dreamtime mythology. They are my favourite birds.

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  23. wow, this is so beautiful! lovely imagery.

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  24. So happy and light in spirit. I am smiling.

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  25. Anonymous11:32 pm

    I like this tanka - I need to learn how to write one. How nice to watch the wagtails. Ilike the comparison between the hand holding and the birds.

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  26. nice to imagine this scene you've described...also, thanks for the link to the wagtails...your posts always have something for me to learn, in addition to enjoying what you've done with words & images.

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