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Wednesday, 17 October 2007

A Poetic Collage

There's poetry in the shapes of the script;
music in the sound of an unknown
tongue drifting in the breeze

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windchimes tinkle
leaves flutter
a river rushes by

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a red book
on a wooden table -
its pages shiver.


inspired by:

On Hearing a Lute-Player by Liu' Chang-ch'ing
Your seven strings are like the voice
Of a cold wind in the pines,
Singing old beloved songs
Which no one cares for any more.

the only translated poem in a red book of Chinese poetry

for Totally Optional Prompts

22 comments:

  1. Oh I love where you went with this.......it made me shiver!

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  2. I have been reading a book about writing poetry and the idea of using other poems for inspriration if often mentioned. I love the theme of this one.

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  3. Well today happened something odd. I suddendly stopped to work and told me to have to find that blogspot profile of that... Girl? (Maybe Lady) of that city I love with all myself, able to write in Italian as I am not in English.

    A sec later gmail warned me about three new comments on my blog. The yours...

    May I dedicate to a poet few lines of a poetry by W.Blake I love?:

    ""To see a World in a Grain of Sand
    And a Heaven in a Wild Flower,
    Hold Infinity in the palm of your hand And Eternity in an hour.""

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  4. Its beautiful...specially the line "its pages shiver"...
    Love it.

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  5. Gosh I love the imagery in the first one. But the last one is excellent! It's amazing how a line or poem or phrase can inspire one to write their own beautiful lines. Love this set Juliet

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  6. You've done a wonderful job with this prompt--leaves fluttering and pages shivering--great.

    http://collectingmythoughts.blogspot.com/2007/10/4230-totally-optional-prompts-alumni-of.html

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  7. "There's poetry in the shapes of the script;"

    wonderful line!

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  8. very light and breezy.. enjoyed it very much

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  9. These all flow so well together, I enjoyed them all very much. Beautiful!

    Christy

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  10. Nice job. The stanza about the red book is awesome.

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  11. Anonymous4:18 pm

    Wonderfully done. I liked the red book one too much.

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  12. like the tinkling windchimes part..
    nicely done

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  13. the sound of an unknown/tongue...is exquisite and surely fits the prompt. Each of these has a particular poetic music. Love them!

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  14. Anonymous8:02 pm

    I like how the pages shiver

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  15. This is a delightful response to the prompt. There's not a line I could do without.

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  16. Anonymous8:32 pm

    Oh, wow. Gorgeous work, and all three together add up to something more powerful than each alone.

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  17. Lovely, indeed! I enjoyed each of them.
    Mad Kane

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  18. The simplicity of form is beautiful - very much a case of less is more. Lovely.

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  19. I can feel the poems floating out of the shivering red book - rushing towards me...

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  20. Anonymous7:42 pm

    All perfectly written. You can imagine somebody reading the book by the river.


    www.thequietone.net

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  21. Dig that lute player line . . . "cold wind in the pines" . . .

    Will stay with me all day long, and then some . . .

    Thanks . . .

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  22. I like the way my "eyes" moved from one scene to another. And that red book! It was mine! Great images! ~Linda

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