music in the sound of an unknown
tongue drifting in the breeze
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windchimes tinkle
leaves flutter
a river rushes by
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a red book
on a wooden table -
its pages shiver.
inspired by:
On Hearing a Lute-Player by Liu' Chang-ch'ing
Your seven strings are like the voice
Of a cold wind in the pines,
Singing old beloved songs
Which no one cares for any more.
the only translated poem in a red book of Chinese poetry
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Oh I love where you went with this.......it made me shiver!
ReplyDeleteI have been reading a book about writing poetry and the idea of using other poems for inspriration if often mentioned. I love the theme of this one.
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May I dedicate to a poet few lines of a poetry by W.Blake I love?:
""To see a World in a Grain of Sand
And a Heaven in a Wild Flower,
Hold Infinity in the palm of your hand And Eternity in an hour.""
Its beautiful...specially the line "its pages shiver"...
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Gosh I love the imagery in the first one. But the last one is excellent! It's amazing how a line or poem or phrase can inspire one to write their own beautiful lines. Love this set Juliet
ReplyDeleteYou've done a wonderful job with this prompt--leaves fluttering and pages shivering--great.
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"There's poetry in the shapes of the script;"
ReplyDeletewonderful line!
very light and breezy.. enjoyed it very much
ReplyDeleteThese all flow so well together, I enjoyed them all very much. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteChristy
Nice job. The stanza about the red book is awesome.
ReplyDeleteWonderfully done. I liked the red book one too much.
ReplyDeletelike the tinkling windchimes part..
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the sound of an unknown/tongue...is exquisite and surely fits the prompt. Each of these has a particular poetic music. Love them!
ReplyDeleteI like how the pages shiver
ReplyDeleteThis is a delightful response to the prompt. There's not a line I could do without.
ReplyDeleteOh, wow. Gorgeous work, and all three together add up to something more powerful than each alone.
ReplyDeleteLovely, indeed! I enjoyed each of them.
ReplyDeleteMad Kane
The simplicity of form is beautiful - very much a case of less is more. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteI can feel the poems floating out of the shivering red book - rushing towards me...
ReplyDeleteAll perfectly written. You can imagine somebody reading the book by the river.
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Dig that lute player line . . . "cold wind in the pines" . . .
ReplyDeleteWill stay with me all day long, and then some . . .
Thanks . . .
I like the way my "eyes" moved from one scene to another. And that red book! It was mine! Great images! ~Linda
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