I especially like the second one, with the surprise at the end. This is one of the things that makes haiku so wonderful and so unique and is a mark of good writing. Thanks
These are beautiful, delicate yet strong. I'm a sucker for moon imagery. Decided to have a go at one deep breath myself, have been watching from the sidelines for a while now...
i really liked these. they reminded me of this poem by average poet as well...
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Most lovely... the moon that drifts through our days and our dreams.
ReplyDeleteIt's Tuesday in Scotland!
ReplyDeletenice contrast in both haiku.
ReplyDeletethanks for visiting me, i really like your blog & shall stop by again
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian, I'll go and read the link.
ReplyDeletel.l.barkat - thanks!
Kevin Doran - lol! It is now! Sometimes I juggle dates to avoid lots of posts on one day. Now I've been found out!
Polona - thanks!
Pangolin - thanks, hope to 'see' you again soon!
Hi Crafty,
ReplyDeleteI love seeing the moon in daylight. I've never lost my fascination with the view.
Hope you are well.
Thanks Brian - yes it always fascinates me too! I'm well thanks, hope you are too.
ReplyDeletemoon floats and moon hangs- so descriptive! Love these poems!
ReplyDeleteHey just stopping by! Luv your vision of the MOON! Nice haiku!!!
ReplyDeleteThey are both lovely but I really love that second one.
ReplyDeleteOh- "blue velvet night"... that is such an exquisite expression... and I can see those bats, too!
ReplyDeleteLove them both but particularly the swifts and bats that fly through them. Fantastic!
ReplyDeleteI like how your haiku always have some moment of action placed neatly in with the still portrait. Very lovely.
ReplyDeleteI love your moonstruck theme and I can picture that white moon hanging in the black velvet.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful imagery... I have never written haiku, but would like to try... any advice for a novice? :)
ReplyDeleteLove the summery imagery. This evokes memories growing up on the East coast.
ReplyDeleteOK... I tried a couple. How'd I do?! ;)
ReplyDeletevery nice contrast of pale vs bright. delightful haiku
ReplyDeletelove the contrast. Moon jumps out. love the transition to the bats and the swifts. beautiful
ReplyDeleteI especially like the second one, with the surprise at the end. This is one of the things that makes haiku so wonderful and so unique and is a mark of good writing.
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These are beautiful, delicate yet strong. I'm a sucker for moon imagery. Decided to have a go at one deep breath myself, have been watching from the sidelines for a while now...
ReplyDeleteSuch brilliant images appear to me of the day moon and the night moon. Beautiful haiku.
ReplyDeleteLove that first one. I adore the moon, but particularly day moons. And my spirit soars with those birds. :-)
ReplyDeleteI love the day moon poem, but I really found the contrast of the second one most appealing.
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