overcast sky -
dandelions flower
yellow in the grass.
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raindrops
on petals of red roses –
a rainbow.
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grassy undergrowth
full of tiny flowers –
field guide bent open.
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embroidered flowers
on my t-shirt –
wasp hovers.
Flowers for One Deep Breath
dandelions flower
yellow in the grass.
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raindrops
on petals of red roses –
a rainbow.
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grassy undergrowth
full of tiny flowers –
field guide bent open.
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embroidered flowers
on my t-shirt –
wasp hovers.
Flowers for One Deep Breath
All very nice. I especially loved the last one.
ReplyDeleteI love the contrast of the grey, overcast sky and the bright highlighs of yellow flowers below. The last one made me chuckle :)
ReplyDeletelovely visions blooming in color, standing out from trails of grey.
ReplyDeleteI like the last one very much but the other three fall flat for me.
ReplyDeleteAren't dandelions always yellow?
petals of red roses sounds a bit convoluted and the third seems a bit tortuous but the succinctness and understatement of the fourth makes up for the other three.
Mandy - so sorry the first three disappoint. Glad the last one made up for it.
ReplyDeleteHanulf - yes it was the contrast I was going for in the first one. Glad the last one made you smile.
Rax, brian - thanks.
Something about that second one... it took me to another place of a tranquil moment. I love the imagery you describe, raindrops the vison of a rainbow on the red petals. Gawwd, I just luv that one!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed each one! So obvious that you are a true lover of nature.
ReplyDeleteI am partial to the third one- I can just see you there... these were all lovely!
ReplyDeleteLove that last one! LOL!
ReplyDeleteLike second and last best.
ReplyDeleteSuch spot on snapshots of summer outdoors! Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteThe last one's special - makes you see things from another creatures eyes!
ReplyDeleteunedited life - wow you really liked that one! Thanks!
ReplyDeleteSandy - yes I love nature!
Regina - yes that third one comes straight from experience!
Roswila, Jem - thanks, I think that one's my favourite!
heartful blogger - thanks, these snapshots will have to do instead of any real summer!
spacedlaw - thanks!
I like "flower yellow" as a verb phrase. And the double color contrast makes this poem work -- the bright colors coming through on an overcast day,as well as the assumed yellow on green.
ReplyDeleteAnd the fourth is just silly fun. I like it.
r.w - glad you like the double colour. Yes the last one is silly fun - as long as the wasp hovers and doesn't sting!
ReplyDeleteI especially like the first one: it makes me think of early spring back home.
ReplyDeleteI loved the accurate contrast in the dandelion one and was there wearing your shirt in the last one. I don't like them hovering around me.
ReplyDeleteI love these. Sorry I'm so slow this week. Been busy. I love all of these. I love "wasp hovers", "overcast sky", but my favorites are the 2nd and 3rd. I like the descriptions, esp the 3rd. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI'm with Regina in being partial to the third. I can see you -- not that I've ever seen you. Perhaps, then, that I can see me there?
ReplyDeleteI especially like the third and fourth haiku - they evoked such clear pictures.
ReplyDeletea rainbow in a raindrop on a petal
ReplyDeletethat's my definition of poetry actually
I'm a little late in getting to these, but it was worth the wait. I love these. Each one is a little jewel: of yellow, of rainbows, of a field guide bent open, of a wasp hovering near embroidered flowers on your t-shirt. I got such a vivid picture in my mind and spirit with these. Really lovely.
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