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Monday, 4 June 2007

haiku - architecture

crumbling stone walls
of an abandoned house -
a gnarled olive tree.


Architecture for
One Deep Breath

27 comments:

  1. Beautiful, simple image. The olive tree makes me wonder what hands used to pick here, and why they are gone.

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  2. what a timeless image!
    love it

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  3. Visions of where I would rather be come leaping into my mind. :-)

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  4. Anonymous6:23 am

    sometimes we do seem to be rather temporary

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  5. Anonymous11:30 am

    Don't you just love old homesteads? I can picture this in my mind!

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  6. so much atmosphere! i can imagine it either in the country here in italy, or in greece too. beautiful!!!

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  7. abandoned homes
    always there is a tree
    still growing

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  8. l.l.barkat, polona, jess - thanks

    mike - yes, everything is temporary!

    sandy - glad you can see it in your mind!

    na - well I was sort of thinking of Italy when I wrote it, though other stories lead into it too from other places.

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  9. The people leave, but their traces remain.

    Coming upon an abandoned dwelling makes me feel like an archeologist or historical anthropologist.

    Great imagery.

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  10. This is just like looking out the window...
    Nathalie

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  11. Love the imagery in this, and the impermanency.

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  12. Yes, the imagery is simple but complex at the same time- I often wonder about abandoned houses...

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  13. I agree, timeless image. It made me picture a war torn home in Italy. Nice job!

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  14. stunning word image... :)

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  15. Anonymous5:14 pm

    the olive tree seals the deal!

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  16. Hi,

    I’m hosting the Ringing of the Bards poetry blog carnival, June 16. If you’d like to be included, leave a comment here or email me at tielansari @ gmail dot com any time through June 15.

    Any style is welcome, but I’m particularly showcasing formal poetry this time around.

    Don’t forget to come back and see the carnival!

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  17. Reminds me of Provence.

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  18. Simple and elegant, this is a perfect snapshot.

    Just lovely :)

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  19. beautiful vision

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  20. Tammy - yes, war torn was the other part of my thinking behind this!

    Mandy - I always enjoy a haiku in response to a haiku!

    reprehreiestless - me too!

    spacedlaw, getzapped, shelby, quietpaths - thanks!

    Regina - there are always so many potential stories there aren't there?

    Tiel - I'll try to remember this time, honest! Thanks for asking!

    Becca, Rax - thanks!

    Colourful Prose - one day perhaps I'll go to Provence!

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  21. gnarled,...great use of that word

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  22. A "gnarled olive tree," not an olive branch. Perhaps that is why I'm also thinking conflict.

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  23. This haiku captures a lovely image.

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  24. Great haiku. So easy to imagine the image and wonderful description in the short amount of words. I just also have to mention I saw you like Ani DiFranco. She has been my absolute favorite female musician for the last ten years. I have seen her in concert twice. Yet another thing we share in common.

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  25. When I read this, I smelled the olives. I love how the words you put together created a sensation.

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  26. Chris - I've seen Ani di Franco in concert twice too! Glad you like the haiku!

    Brian, Hanulf, Inland Empire Girl - thanks

    Patois - interesting point!

    The story behind the haiku was of a house deserted or bombed during conflict and the olive tree, symbolising peace, growing out of it. Though I imagined the story being set in the Middle East, the place I pictured was definitely Italy.

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