In One Deep Breath this week we are asked to get close, closer and still closer in the observations in our haiku. This weekend I was visiting my parents in Worsley, near Manchester. We had a walk by the red Bridgewater Canal. These are my three haiku, which really call out for photos too, but we had forgotten our camera and my parents don't have a digital!
the red canal
flows through the village -
four swans.
two young swans
with plumage speckled grey -
historic bridge.
water droplets
sparkle on the swans' backs -
rainbows.
Lovely imagery painted with your words - I can see those swans!
ReplyDeleteI can see them too! Great writing. That last one is my favorite.
ReplyDeleteThe last is my favorite too. This sounds a very tranquil and lovely place to relax with one's thoughts.
ReplyDeleteVery nice - I can picture them from your words without the photos
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ReplyDeleteflows through the village -
four swans.
Love the contrast of red and white in this one. And the sort of peaceful flow.
two young swans
with plumage speckled grey -
historic bridge.
The contrast here between young and old is really wonderful. I can almost write a story on it.
Good images, well done.
ReplyDeleteI love the images you painted in my mind. Sometimes the words are worth a thousand pictures. Much peace, JP
ReplyDeleteI like the build up of natural imagery, and then the unexplained bridge. Man made structures in contrast or even conflict with nature. In my mind, anyway.
ReplyDeleteJuliet,
ReplyDeleteBeautiful!
I crafted my own picture from your words. You've provided all the pieces of a scenic mosiac.
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Beautiful serene imagery. I especially like rainbow from "water droplets" on the swans backs.
ReplyDeleteLovely :)
The words painted the photos, beautiful images of an autumn day.
ReplyDeleteI didn't need pictures to see these closer looks. Now that's talent!
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery - especially all three together. Makes a nice package!
ReplyDeleteExcellent close, closer, closer still series here. That last one was just superb!
ReplyDelete- Bice Sagan
As others have said, great imagery! I especially like the first one. Simple and serene.
ReplyDeletelovely... peaceful. I like the water and color in your images.
ReplyDeleteAll very nice haiku but I especially liked the first. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI was watching swans Monday afternoon - how beautifully you have painted them with your words.
ReplyDeleteHaiku was the first poetry I ever wrote, and where I discovered the magic of writing. I still love it and these are nice, with perfect images.
ReplyDeleteTom
I like these.
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