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Monday 25 September 2006

Haiku - windows and doorways

At One Deep Breath this week we're asked to write haiku about windows and doorways. First I wrote two haiku about looking out of the window, the first in Edinburgh yesterday, the second from our Bed and Breakfast hotel in Ventimiglia, Italy last November:

outside the window -
rain lashes down
from a dark leaden sky.

outside the window –
the Mediterranean
merges with blue sky.


Then finally:

the black cat
watches over the garden –
framed by the doorway.

There's yet another haiku on this theme on my Alter Ego blog here.

12 comments:

  1. I love the image in your second haiku of the sea merging with the sky. So beautiful.

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  2. I'm with Jodi - the second is my favourite. Lovely images you paint with your poems!

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  3. I could certainly picture the rain lashing down. Very evocative images in all your haiku.

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  4. All three are wonderful, but the second one REALLY resonates with me!

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  5. Anonymous8:04 pm

    I would love to look through that second window!

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  6. I can picture each of these vividly, but wish I was there instead :) Lovely!

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  7. I hope the sun shines sometimes in Edinburgh, too! I enjoyed your haiku.

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  8. These are lovely. I really like outside the window. How awesome to be able to see the Mediterranean outside a window. :)

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  9. "rain lashes down
    from a dark leaden sky"
    simply gorgeous..both the imagery and the sounds these words evoke!

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  10. Thanks for all your comments folks! Catherine, don't worry, Edinburgh is usually sunny with lovely blue skies and wild winds. But when it does rain it can be torrential.....

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  11. Anonymous7:06 pm

    lovely haiku - i can certainly relate to the first as that is the current weather here! the third is very well put too :)

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  12. my favourite's the last one, such a lovely understated building of images :-)

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