tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post440464275866122457..comments2024-03-28T10:05:36.756+00:00Comments on Crafty Green Poet: haiku - breathCrafty Green Poethttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-55044377300255448242007-03-23T22:23:00.000+00:002007-03-23T22:23:00.000+00:00I like them both. My favourite is the second one. ...I like them both. My favourite is the second one. Upon first reading it seemed rather dark, probably after reading the first. The second time I read it I realised the humour of the Haiku and loved it.Beamanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10516397458228874124noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-40021157614310837182007-03-23T12:30:00.000+00:002007-03-23T12:30:00.000+00:00I like the contrast.niceI like the contrast.<BR/>niceAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-34044154297723849942007-03-23T00:31:00.000+00:002007-03-23T00:31:00.000+00:00I love your first haiku the most. So true, so tim...I love your first haiku the most. So true, so timely, so lovely.<BR/><BR/>jbjennifer blackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10162940461142708018noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-89617708738807627702007-03-22T00:46:00.000+00:002007-03-22T00:46:00.000+00:00Lovely haiku! The contrasts are excellent! I esp...Lovely haiku! The contrasts are excellent! I especially liked the second one, even though it's not a very happy story :o)wrchilihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01117935090937352862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-90706437219398219962007-03-21T21:00:00.000+00:002007-03-21T21:00:00.000+00:00I do wish those first spring blossoms were here in...I do wish those first spring blossoms were here in my area.<BR/><BR/>Such a laugh with the second :DJuliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04271616371758781735noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-75174177235241074382007-03-21T15:26:00.000+00:002007-03-21T15:26:00.000+00:00chuckle...chuckle...get zappedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07716557355765204155noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-32252287242254412422007-03-21T13:36:00.000+00:002007-03-21T13:36:00.000+00:00I think the animal nature in ourselves comes throu...I think the animal nature in ourselves comes through when we scent our surroundings. Well observed!jemhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08181038873568527264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-40000727424522498482007-03-21T12:53:00.000+00:002007-03-21T12:53:00.000+00:00I am still laughing over your second Haiku. Made m...I am still laughing over your second Haiku. Made my day it did.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-41134176653244266702007-03-21T08:37:00.000+00:002007-03-21T08:37:00.000+00:00Thanks for all your commentsTammy - glad I made yo...Thanks for all your comments<BR/>Tammy - glad I made you chuckle.<BR/>Liza - maybe I should have put them the other way round to leave people soothed?<BR/>Mandy - I know, pooor wee timourous beastie....<BR/>Gaby - yes I know Fernando Pessoa, I love his Book of Unquiet, thanks for the quote.Crafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-9268283095684767802007-03-21T02:53:00.000+00:002007-03-21T02:53:00.000+00:00There is a portugese poet named Fernando Pessoa. ...There is a portugese poet named Fernando Pessoa. Do you know him? He said:<BR/>"O poeta é um fingidor... que finge a dor que deveras sente.<BR/>I will try to translate it:<BR/><BR/>" The poet is a pretender who pretends the pain he really feels"<BR/><BR/>gabygaby braunhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13558704825221358410noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-47676257933148978122007-03-21T02:14:00.000+00:002007-03-21T02:14:00.000+00:00Another great effort! I too felt the tension of th...Another great effort! I too felt the tension of the 'rapid breaths of fear', even the mystery of the mouse falling down dead. Amazing how you tell a wonderful story in three short lines. I guess that's what haiku is all about.<BR/>ThanksAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-23610580667151957822007-03-20T22:38:00.000+00:002007-03-20T22:38:00.000+00:00Nice -- I was so surprised by the second one after...Nice -- I was so surprised by the second one after being soothed by the first! Great job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02776482696203224923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-16160872125226951812007-03-20T21:53:00.000+00:002007-03-20T21:53:00.000+00:00These were both lovely but I had to chuckle at my ...These were both lovely but I had to chuckle at my visual of you shrieking ;)Tammy Brierlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14673290512175050093noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-86762583214887434672007-03-20T18:51:00.000+00:002007-03-20T18:51:00.000+00:00what are you doing to that timerous beastiewhat are you doing to that timerous beastieMandyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09390965174767597956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-45014328175991295322007-03-20T18:21:00.000+00:002007-03-20T18:21:00.000+00:00the first scents of spring are always wonderful......the first scents of spring are always wonderful...as are your 'kurhinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07362174393467504089noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-15379926812021831882007-03-20T18:04:00.000+00:002007-03-20T18:04:00.000+00:00The first is lovely, the second one I can relate t...The first is lovely, the second one I can relate to, just replace snake with mouse!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-35143433070524402322007-03-20T17:13:00.000+00:002007-03-20T17:13:00.000+00:00Micies scare me, too...The first one is so beautif...Micies scare me, too...<BR/>The first one is so beautiful_ am breathing right now...Reginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14287107184977896696noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-30041783225029631282007-03-20T16:55:00.000+00:002007-03-20T16:55:00.000+00:00Oh I can feel the second one. Fear always take my ...Oh I can feel the second one. Fear always take my breath away. Great post.Biancahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00088824498525909843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-22541667932351950812007-03-20T13:23:00.000+00:002007-03-20T13:23:00.000+00:00Thanks for your comments. Kamsin, no it doesn't ma...Thanks for your comments. Kamsin, no it doesn't make you a bad person, I would have probably found it funny at the time if I hadn't been so scared. (I am terrified of mice for some reason!).Crafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-22764113938618559602007-03-20T12:26:00.000+00:002007-03-20T12:26:00.000+00:00Yes, lovely contrast! Does it make me a bad perso...Yes, lovely contrast! Does it make me a bad person that I found the second one funny, with the image of the leaping mouse!Kamsinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07039627235813416300noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-46572559385775854202007-03-20T02:16:00.000+00:002007-03-20T02:16:00.000+00:00I like the contrast, too. Deep breaths & shallow o...I like the contrast, too. Deep breaths & shallow ones. Very nice.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-19603301511171661262007-03-19T14:31:00.000+00:002007-03-19T14:31:00.000+00:00What an interesting comparision between the two 'k...What an interesting comparision between the two 'ku ... I liked it! JPJP (mom)https://www.blogger.com/profile/03120439923927414464noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-22007755861677662062007-03-19T13:47:00.000+00:002007-03-19T13:47:00.000+00:00Life and death in spring. Great contrast.Life and death in spring. Great contrast.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com