tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post3744253543816003783..comments2024-03-27T23:08:37.191+00:00Comments on Crafty Green Poet: ConfluenceCrafty Green Poethttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comBlogger32125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-27922922070252237852007-12-13T17:23:00.000+00:002007-12-13T17:23:00.000+00:00varying indeed, didnt know it could be done until ...varying indeed, didnt know it could be done until this.. thank you.<BR/><BR/><A HREF="http://ul-typingaway.blogspot.com/" REL="nofollow">UL</A>Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-87662874563098572412007-06-06T20:25:00.000+01:002007-06-06T20:25:00.000+01:00I love some of the word choice in this poem: king...I love some of the word choice in this poem: kingfishers dart... nice, sharp.Mollyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02684472385651395069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-68026189667347737122007-06-03T18:11:00.000+01:002007-06-03T18:11:00.000+01:00my backyuard, writer on blard, inland empire girl ...my backyuard, writer on blard, inland empire girl - thanks!Crafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-58732377292791829762007-06-03T18:03:00.000+01:002007-06-03T18:03:00.000+01:00The flow of this poem is just right. My favorite l...The flow of this poem is just right. My favorite lines are<BR/>"flat estuary mud punctuated by lonely calls of curlew<BR/>and poor immigrants scraping a living from sinking sands."<BR/>Beautiful word choice.Christy Woolumhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02748862572108653566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-15086887107028239452007-06-01T19:45:00.000+01:002007-06-01T19:45:00.000+01:00Beautiful sad. Thank you Juliet.Beautiful sad. Thank you Juliet.Writing on Boardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03586187888418224291noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-62057989269233588642007-06-01T16:37:00.000+01:002007-06-01T16:37:00.000+01:00I was sucked in by the flow of the water and then ...I was sucked in by the flow of the water and then the sadness of the grim reality at the end.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-80808871090185123152007-06-01T11:32:00.000+01:002007-06-01T11:32:00.000+01:00jim, chicklegirl, paris, ron and bookbinds - thank...jim, chicklegirl, paris, ron and bookbinds - thanks. <BR/><BR/>jessica - yes I did want the last line to be ambiguous, glad that worked for you!<BR/><BR/>Clare, glad you like my verbs! <BR/><BR/>Deb, GeL - thanks!Crafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-38622560621873597382007-06-01T11:29:00.000+01:002007-06-01T11:29:00.000+01:00Polona, Rose - thanks for recognising the grim as ...Polona, Rose - thanks for recognising the grim as real. Sometimes I feel I overdo it!<BR/><BR/>Chris - thanks!<BR/><BR/>Gautami - glad you think it flows like a river!<BR/><BR/>Rob - thanks!<BR/><BR/>Pip - yes it's very sad how we're all killing our rivers. <BR/><BR/>Reagan, Remiman - thanks!<BR/><BR/>Pauline - yes, although it is meant literally, there is an analogy in there too, thanks for noticing!<BR/><BR/>Becca, twitches, colleen, regina, pepek - thanks!<BR/><BR/>Tammy - I won't try to get it published in this form because journals often don't like poems to have appeared on blogs. Plus this is still a draft really, but thanks.Crafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-20781285657654690792007-06-01T09:24:00.000+01:002007-06-01T09:24:00.000+01:00liked this one a lotmany lovely phrases and nice i...liked this one a lot<BR/>many lovely phrases <BR/>and nice imageryAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-67347216489045703972007-06-01T05:48:00.000+01:002007-06-01T05:48:00.000+01:00Some of my favorite words (such as confluence) and...Some of my favorite words (such as confluence) and beings (such as kingfishers) travel (the structure and tempo work wonderfully). <BR/><BR/>I empathize with your image and admire your craft.Debhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14744896385434246402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-67524572760355739342007-06-01T04:01:00.000+01:002007-06-01T04:01:00.000+01:00Your choice of verbs and images are very powerful ...Your choice of verbs and images are very powerful and move your poem along in a very dramatic way. I really like this and how it goes from pretty and innocent to the reality of what is happening to so many of our rivers. Well done.Clarehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11746014771712020963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-60720710897172462702007-06-01T00:44:00.000+01:002007-06-01T00:44:00.000+01:00I love the movement from a beautiful vibrant river...I love the movement from a beautiful vibrant river to the dead dregs. I did find, though, the last line to be both hopeful and ominous. Lovely!Jessicahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09701158085304753313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-78222015759963816182007-05-31T19:19:00.000+01:002007-05-31T19:19:00.000+01:00The poem really captured all the varied realties o...The poem really captured all the varied realties of river and how they affect the land and inhabitants around them. I found the second stanza particularly powerful, <BR/><BR/>"meanders through meadows where swallows<BR/>swoop and cows graze; farmers fatten<BR/>gently in houses behind the hedged<BR/>edges of the fields"Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-74976192463833854652007-05-31T17:47:00.000+01:002007-05-31T17:47:00.000+01:00The contrast is strong and makes the point even st...The contrast is strong and makes the point even stronger! Well done. You've got our attention.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-27782873924385767842007-05-31T17:37:00.000+01:002007-05-31T17:37:00.000+01:00That was quite an abrupt switch, from an idyllic r...That was quite an abrupt switch, from an idyllic rendition of the river's lovely qualities to the pollution and ravages. Brilliant!paris parfaithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05457437124988976587noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-2513123637008099722007-05-31T17:12:00.000+01:002007-05-31T17:12:00.000+01:00You captured the full scope of what a river can be...You captured the full scope of what a river can be, shouldn't be--yet is.chicklegirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03000215636803243874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-82674032771006590402007-05-31T16:06:00.000+01:002007-05-31T16:06:00.000+01:00A full brave sweep, all that a river will carry wi...A full brave sweep, all that a river will carry with it.Jim Brockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14408507847342833145noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-54340508467891571682007-05-31T15:56:00.000+01:002007-05-31T15:56:00.000+01:00Wonderful poetry that takes us on a jouney of puri...Wonderful poetry that takes us on a jouney of purity to disaster. This should be sent out into the world (published) for people to get the visual progression.Tammy Brierlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14673290512175050093noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-80974022487216453202007-05-31T15:15:00.000+01:002007-05-31T15:15:00.000+01:00What a trip!What a trip!Joyce Ellen Davishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13494251587598676788noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-78348699822822147452007-05-31T14:44:00.000+01:002007-05-31T14:44:00.000+01:00Rivers have it so bad now- we are losing our wonde...Rivers have it so bad now- we are losing our wonderful resources! I like how you always remind us of how much we need to take care of nature!Reginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14287107184977896696noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-87064780394653898422007-05-31T14:36:00.000+01:002007-05-31T14:36:00.000+01:00A sad contrast. I can hear the children laughing ...A sad contrast. I can hear the children laughing but see the factory smoke too. Very nice read!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-57541486482079683582007-05-31T13:53:00.000+01:002007-05-31T13:53:00.000+01:00Interesting contrasts...Interesting contrasts...mareymercyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03407666873261385487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-57132883581612843232007-05-31T13:09:00.000+01:002007-05-31T13:09:00.000+01:00The contrast here is stark and telling - the bucol...The contrast here is stark and telling - the bucolic setting to the destruction of "factories spewing poison."<BR/><BR/>As ususal, your poetry edifies and educates the reader - well done!Beccahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14623887166087444590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-5758121985931528222007-05-31T12:23:00.000+01:002007-05-31T12:23:00.000+01:00Oh Crafty. Such a bright hopeful poem that ends in...Oh Crafty. Such a bright hopeful poem that ends in grim reality. (((hugs)))<BR/><BR/>Rose<BR/><BR/>xoAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-51501751868331653762007-05-31T11:12:00.000+01:002007-05-31T11:12:00.000+01:00this is a good analogy for the journey that begins...this is a good analogy for the journey that begins with a springing from innocence, travels through indifference and struggle, and emerges in the endless sea.Paulinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14555472024981357622noreply@blogger.com