tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post2757063813250217413..comments2024-03-28T10:05:36.756+00:00Comments on Crafty Green Poet: Neon Silk City LightsCrafty Green Poethttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-272650213695014802007-05-14T23:09:00.000+01:002007-05-14T23:09:00.000+01:00you all suckyou all suckAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-67281472820935197312007-05-11T16:53:00.000+01:002007-05-11T16:53:00.000+01:00Crafty, I very much like the violent glow of the a...Crafty, I very much like the violent glow of the artificial neon contrasted with the soft glow of the spider's web, and the quiet busy-ness of the spider's work contrasted with the busy feeling of the city centre. Brava!sputnikhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11636063437215380370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-69448088729302904572007-05-11T15:12:00.000+01:002007-05-11T15:12:00.000+01:00Very visual poem, even though its short it hits a ...Very visual poem, even though its short it hits a point swiftly. I will have to keep checking back to read more of your work. And once again thanks for dropping by my spot.Nonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17780195188813239591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-74851969967923556332007-05-11T15:06:00.000+01:002007-05-11T15:06:00.000+01:00Nice!Nice!Writing on Boardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03586187888418224291noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-11101094048307197992007-05-11T10:58:00.000+01:002007-05-11T10:58:00.000+01:00You rose to the challenge well here. (I don't like...You rose to the challenge well here. (I don't like neon lights.)<BR/>Cool idea for poetry.<BR/>I've been traveling and away from blogging. I particularly enjoyed the last line, beginning with "Somewhere/ else a spider spins/ silk across branches."Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-40542839749706351482007-05-11T10:36:00.000+01:002007-05-11T10:36:00.000+01:00Another fantastic poem! And an ingenious use of y...Another fantastic poem! And an ingenious use of your randomiser words.Gino Brignolihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01527513315061424819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-9236045041711549342007-05-11T08:17:00.000+01:002007-05-11T08:17:00.000+01:00I like the message in this. I can really relate r...I like the message in this. I can really relate right now to that longing for nature and simpler things.SquareTravelerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04744444321242833934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-19733396893767409382007-05-11T03:22:00.000+01:002007-05-11T03:22:00.000+01:00Along with all else mentioned I also like the line...Along with all else mentioned I also like the line breaks. There are several in there that make ya think.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-46557579675825466402007-05-11T02:53:00.000+01:002007-05-11T02:53:00.000+01:00While I like the spider lines, I also like the lin...While I like the spider lines, I also like the lines "Metal/tangs our mouths/awake as the alarm/clock blares." What a great surprising image!Jessicahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09701158085304753313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-32327713558842779702007-05-10T22:13:00.000+01:002007-05-10T22:13:00.000+01:00Wonderful contrast and creativity in using those w...Wonderful contrast and creativity in using those words.Tammy Brierlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14673290512175050093noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-51838521291639235902007-05-10T18:19:00.000+01:002007-05-10T18:19:00.000+01:00I liked both poems. I like the contrast between n...I liked both poems. I like the contrast between nature and the city in the first one, the image of the dancer with the glow sticks in the second one. Neat to see two different approaches to the same words.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-78507904114955153802007-05-10T17:40:00.000+01:002007-05-10T17:40:00.000+01:00The title too...oh yes, the title!Love,D.The title too...oh yes, the title!<BR/>Love,<BR/>D.Left-handed Trees...https://www.blogger.com/profile/06057727021295729384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-30601647163872971672007-05-10T17:25:00.000+01:002007-05-10T17:25:00.000+01:00I love the rhymes and visuals -- and also, I can t...I love the rhymes and visuals -- and also, I can taste it as the metal tangs! This poem is beautiful and feels so present and alive! <BR/>:)Clarehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11746014771712020963noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-44356477885128903592007-05-10T16:25:00.000+01:002007-05-10T16:25:00.000+01:00Yes, the contrast was so lovely and true... our bu...Yes, the contrast was so lovely and true... our busyness and the spider's patience as they wevae their web...Reginahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14287107184977896696noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-77113812976189746682007-05-10T15:45:00.000+01:002007-05-10T15:45:00.000+01:00As usual, a good read. I enjoyed the transition fr...As usual, a good read. I enjoyed the transition from the harsh (lights) to the gentle (web weaving).Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-62437952931062370942007-05-10T15:31:00.000+01:002007-05-10T15:31:00.000+01:00"Musical" is exactly right! Neon and silk--what gr..."Musical" is exactly right! Neon and silk--what great words to juxtapose.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-38242194366241383932007-05-10T15:11:00.000+01:002007-05-10T15:11:00.000+01:00beautifully flows. "a spider spinssilk across bran...beautifully flows. <BR/><BR/>"a spider spins<BR/>silk across branches<BR/>of a hawthorn bush"<BR/><BR/>Beautiful lines..gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-75839571680392339972007-05-10T14:50:00.000+01:002007-05-10T14:50:00.000+01:00Really nice contrast between the neon and the ligh...Really nice contrast between the neon and the lights in the web.-- between the artificial and the natural, as it were....Joyce Ellen Davishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13494251587598676788noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-36829012357978022782007-05-10T14:45:00.000+01:002007-05-10T14:45:00.000+01:00The aural qualities are so good here, with all tho...The aural qualities are so good here, with all those "--are" rhymes scattered about. And yes, the contrasting imagery works so well in this tight lyric.Jim Brockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14408507847342833145noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-7654018196917254602007-05-10T13:53:00.000+01:002007-05-10T13:53:00.000+01:00delightful! I loved the juxtaposition of the fren...delightful! I loved the juxtaposition of the frenzy of modern life and the measured pace of nature. <BR/><BR/>The section about the spider was really well done. Every word contributes to the image. Thanks for sharing this. I will be returning to that spider-place mentally when life gets hectic!Sashahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00483234172434544811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-89453587545625173582007-05-10T12:21:00.000+01:002007-05-10T12:21:00.000+01:00I like both poems - they are very different. It's ...I like both poems - they are very different. It's amazing what can be done with the random prompt generator!Catherinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08236329216260906624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-12320541053661910472007-05-10T12:19:00.000+01:002007-05-10T12:19:00.000+01:00I like the contrast you've given with the spider. ...I like the contrast you've given with the spider. :)<BR/><BR/>Rose<BR/><BR/>xoAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-46663002472978001802007-05-10T12:17:00.000+01:002007-05-10T12:17:00.000+01:00I must agree with Rob. He used the word musical w...I must agree with Rob. He used the word musical which is what I wanted to say. This poem just flowed and I was able to read it very quickly but still catch it. (I still read it many times :) The opening hit me because I love to buy things, although I don't need a neon sign, just a website.Clockworkchrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09889793842709699969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-8593605475025843452007-05-10T10:36:00.000+01:002007-05-10T10:36:00.000+01:00Awake at 4 a.m. I came here to read poetry and eve...Awake at 4 a.m. I came here to read poetry and even at that ungodly hour, was delighted with the juxtaposition of ideas in this.Paulinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14555472024981357622noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16542790.post-18629314324979852412007-05-10T08:57:00.000+01:002007-05-10T08:57:00.000+01:00"Somewhereelse a spider spinssilk across brancheso..."Somewhere<BR/>else a spider spins<BR/>silk across branches<BR/>of a hawthorn bush,<BR/>a web that glows<BR/>in soft dawnlight"<BR/><BR/>This is wonderfully musical.Rob Kistnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11365982588165098990noreply@blogger.com